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[ArkhamInmate47]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Captain_(comics)



Ok I have absolutely no grasp of how to write comic book format. I used Final Draft and did my best to put things into a comic friendly script. My entry features a mainstream villain and an obscure hero. In this I pit Dr. Doom against The Captain from Nextwave. I am totally open to criticism and I know I will catch some for my format lol.I just hope you all enjoy the story.

"None The Weiser"
Page 1
INT. CASTLE DOOM. THRONE ROOM

1-Two servants kneel in front of Doom’s throne.

DOOM
Is there any further business? I have matters to attend to.

SERVANT 1
No my Lord Doom.

DOOM
Then be gone. I am bored with your prattling

SFX-BOOM

2-The wall explodes and The Captain flies through.

3-Wide shot of The Captain as he smacks into the opposite wall head first.

4-Doom rises from his throne.

DOOM
What is this ?! Who dares?!

5-The Captain doesn’t move. Doom’s servants have him lifted one taking each arm.

SERVANT 1
He is unconscious my Lord Doom.

SERVANT 2
And he smells of alcohol.

DOOM
Take him to my laboratories. He obviously is one of the powered fools to have survived that fall. He may provide some useful knowledge in his stupidity.

6-The servants drag The Captain away.

Page 2

1- The Captain wakes up and smashes the two servants together face first.

2-The Captain looking at Doom,the servants at his feet.

THE CAPTAIN
Nobody calls me stupid.Let’s do this Tinman.

DOOM
Your insults are as childish as your actions. I shall not show you mercy fool. You have invaded my country and my home. For this Doom does not give quarter.

THE CAPTAIN
I wasn’t looking for bus fare anyway.

3- The Captain launches himself at Doom.

4- Doom blasts him with a beam in his gauntlet.

5-The Captain(now smoking from the beam hit) slams into Doom’s chest .

DOOM
Stronger than I had anticipated. That shall be my last underestimation of you.

6-Doom grabs The Captain by his coat and swings him back and behind him into the wall.

THE CAPTAIN
That all you got? I got hit harder once by a third grader.

DOOM
Your insults bore me.

THE CAPTAIN
No seriously. I asked some kid once to borrow some money for a six pack and he punched me right in the gut. Took me like three minutes to compose myself.

DOOM
ENOUGH!

1-Doom unleashes a salvo of mini missiles from his wrists.

2- The Captain dodges most of them but is hit by the last two.

Page 3

SFX-KABOOM

3-The Captain stands but is wobbling.

THE CAPTAIN
Take more than that to put me down.

4-The Captain flies at Doom again.

5-Doom side steps but The Captain stops.

6- The Captain punches Doom five times in the face with alternating lefts and rights.

7-Doom(his mask now dented and beyond repair) cocks his arm back and punches The Captain in the face.

8- The Captain tumbles back and regains his balance as he lands on one knee.

THE CAPTAIN
Feel like giving up?

DOOM
You cannot begin to comprehend the pain I shall inflict upon you as I kill you.

THE CAPTAIN
Can’t say that I could. I don't even know what comprehend means.

The two fly at each other and just as they are about to collide.

Page 4

MONICA RAMBEAU
OK that’s enough!

1-Coming in through the hole in the wall is Tabitha Smith, Aaron Stack and Monica Rambeau. Elsa Bloodstone stands on the bricks inside the hole.

THIS IS A RARE APPEARANCE BY NEXTWAVE! YOU’RE WELCOME.

MONICA RAMBEAU
Cap stop this right now.

THE CAPTAIN
But I was just about to kick his ass....

MONICA RAMBEAU
No Cap this is an unsanctioned attack and could be perceived as an act of war. Get your ass in this Shockwave Rider NOW!

2-Flies up away from Doom towards the hole he made.

3- As he flies out through the hole Elsa Bloodstone smacks him in the back of the head.

ELSA BLOODSTONE
Wanker.

MONICA RAMBEAU
We apologize for this Dr.Doom. I had no idea these idiots did this.

DOOM
Ah "Captain Marvel". I thought you dead. What do you mean by idiots?

4-Monica looks back at Aaron who is trying not to look at her.

MONICA RAMBEAU
Aaron?

5- Aaron walks up to Doom and hands him a beer.

DOOM
What is this?

AARON STACK
Your beer mostly fleshy one.

DOOM
What is this foolishness?

AARON STACK
I lost my bet.

DOOM
Bet?

Page 5

INT. NEXTWAVE’S FLOATING HEADQUARTERS. A FEW HOURS AGO.

1-The Captain and Aaron Stack are drinking beers together and are very drunk.

THE CAPTAIN
I will bet you your last beer I can kick Doom’s ass!

AARON STACK
He would annihilate you! I will wager my last beer he would not only defeat you but you would not lay one hand on him!

THE CAPTAIN
Done. And if I get one hit in on him you have to give Doom your last beer there!

AARON STACK
HA! The sweet taste of victory is mine foolish fleshy!

INT. CASTLE DOOM. THRONE ROOM. NOW

1-Doom takes the beer and crushes it in his hand.

DOOM
Leave my country now. And never return. For if you do I shall destroy you all.

TABITHA SMITH
Chill out Doom and gloom. We didn’t want to come here in the first place.

2- The Nextwave squad leaves. Monica carries Tabitha and Aaron carries Elsa out of the hole. The Captain is hovering outside waiting for them.

MONICA RAMBEAU
I swear to God sometimes I wish I was back in the Avengers.

TABITHA SMITH
You always wish that.

MONICA RAMBEAU
Shut up X-Force reject.

THE CAPTAIN
Can we stop for some beer? I sobered up on the flight over here.

[Zepster]

Snowfallen

Ok, I’ve gone with Professor X and needed a young/vulnerable(ish) non X telepath to go with. I found Snowfall (http://www.marvunapp.com/Appendix/snowfall.htm ) a powerful yet very young telepath that fit the bill for what I wanted.

Other than that – This is set a few years in the past of the current timeline.

Crits etc.. very welcome

Quick Synopsis ( rather than a pitch )

Warning: Spoilers!

A sleeping Professor X is awakened by a scream emanating from the astral plane. There he discovers a young mutant, Snowfall, being hunted by an astral predator. He intervenes only to discover that she had allowed herself to be hunted in order to draw out the beast that has been stalking her for months. However during his confrontation with the beast the Professor learned that it was but one of a pack of such creatures. Creatures that stalk and slay immature telepaths ( children ) on the astral plane. The Professor surmises that the existence of these creatures explains a relative lack of telepaths in the world. The Professor and Snowfall feign apparent weakness to encourage the creatures to gather that they may destroy the witnesses and thus ensure their secret. Too late the creatures discover the Professor’s ruse as he joins with Snowfall to destroy the pack.

Snowfallen

Page 1

Panel 1

The X-mansion from above/outside. It’s autumn and the setting sun is casting long shadows over the mansion and surrounding forests. An idyllic scene.

Caption: WESTCHESTER COUNTY

Caption: XAVIER’S SCHOOL FOR GIFTED YOUNGSTERS

Caption: BASE OF THE MUTANT ADVENTURERS KNOWN AS THE X-MEN

Panel 2

Close in on the exterior of the building, right outside Professor X’s office , we can see partially inside, but very little detail. The Professor’s chair facing the fireplace maybe.

Caption: THEY ARE LED BY THE GREATEST TELEPATHIC MIND THE WORLD HAS EVER KNOWN

Caption: A VISIONARY, A TEACHER, A GUARDIAN

JEAN(OOS): PROFESSOR?

Panel 3

f/g Jean poking her head through the door

b/g The Professor in his chair from behind

Caption: THE CURATOR OF THE HOPES AND DREAMS OF MUTANT KIND

JEAN: PROFESSOR XAVIER?

JEAN(link): OH

Panel 4

f/g Professor X fast asleep in his chair, a half spilled file of documents on his lap

b/g A smiling Jean gently closing the door as she exits the room

JEAN(Whisper): I’LL CALL BACK LATER

Caption: A MAN ENJOYING A WELL EARNED AFTERNOON NAP

Panel 5

Close in on the Professor’s face, it is drawn/anguished. He is not having a good dream

Caption: YET EVEN SLEEP IS NO ESCAPE FROM HIS MANY BURDENS

Page 2

Panel 1

POV of a young girl ( Snowfall ) as she frantically attempts to run through then undergrowth/thick bushes of a snow covered forest. This is within the astral plane, so we’ll need a few touches of the surreal to help establish this. Its dark/evening time.

Snowfall: AHH HAA HUH HUH

A small note: We’re within the Astral plane so I’d like all the dialog here to be thought bubbles but not the traditional cloud style and definitely no originating dots.

Panel 2

Snowfall in a small clearing in the winter ethereal forest. She is terrified looking about in fear as she catches her breath. The undergrowth is dense/dark. This is a pure nightmare, so intimating trees/dark shadows ( without evil faces on the trees mind you! ). Her clothes are in tatters from running through the brush.

Snowfall: HUH HUH

Panel 3

f/g Snowfall, close in on her face from the side maybe as she reacts in terror to

b/g The silhouette of a large wolf like creature, relatively indistinct due to the undergrowth, with red glowing eyes that faces her. The creature is an astral predator and part of a pack, hence the wolf like appearance, but please take whatever liberties you need to enhance its look.

SNOWFALL: GASP

SFX: GRRRRRRRRRRRRR

Panel 4

Back in his office. Professor X awaking suddenly and distressed

Prof X: A SCREAM!

SFX: EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

( note: The scream is emanating from the astral plane, so if we could do something to indicate its ethereal nature )

Panel 5

The professor in his classic hands to temples pose doing his mind vibe thing

Prof X: I SENSE NO DANGER NEARBY AND YET… THE SCREAM WAS REAL. I’M SURE OF IT

Page 3

Panel 1

Snowfall in the clearing, it’s snowing lightly. The wolf beast, as much misty shadow as substance, circling, stalking. Paw prints in the snow to show this maybe
Snow Fall has picked up some deadwood and is holding it uncertainly. Plucky perhaps but terrified and by the way she is holding the cudgel will not be offering much resistance

Snowfall: GO GO AWAY

SFX: GRRRRRRRRRR

Panel 2

Close in on the wolf beast’s opened maw as it attacks. Lots of saliva and very sharp fangs, its eyes are wide and glowing malevolently.

WOLFBEAST: SNARRRLLLL

Panel 3

f/g A surprised but still angry and formidable Wolf Beast

m/g Prof X in all his astral glory, one arm raised with a shield of light the other wielding an astral sword. The professor has used his shield to repel the creature’s attack

b/g Snowfall on the ground – angrily looking at Prof X

PROF X(Thought Burst): BACK CREATURE!

Panel 4

Professor X facing off the creature, behind him Snowfall is shifting to her adult form

SNOWFALL: YOU’VE RUINED IT. THAT THING HAS BEEN STALKING ME FOR MONTHS AND

PROF X: YOU’D FINALLY LURED IT INTO THE OPEN. VERY BRAVE GIRL BUT VERY VERY FOOLISH.

SNOWFALL: BUT IF IT GETS AWAY I’LL BE BACK TO WHERE I STARTED

Panel 5

f/g A very determined Prof X staring out to where we think the beast is

b/g His hand clasping hers ( this is important. They need to be making contact ).

Her face has a look of startled confusion. Prof X is using the contact to share his thoughts/plan with her covertly.

PROF X: I’VE SEEN ITS THOUGHTS. IT WON’T

Page 4

Panel 1

The creature attacking, knocking the Professor aside and almost at Snowfall’s throat

PROF X: LOOK OUT

SNOWFALL: NO

Panel 2

The Creature has SnowFall pinned to the ground and is going for her throat. She is vainly attempting to push it back

CREATURE: RAWWRRRR

Note: Can we give the creature something special with its lettering/bubble to indicate that it’s evil as hell please

Panel 3

Prof X blasting the creature aside with a mind bolt, but hasn't knocked it very far. He looks though as if he was giving it everything he had

PROFX: AWAY BEAST. YOU DON’T HAVE THE STRENGTH TO DEFEAT US

Panel 4

The Creature close in, a savage vulpine grin on its face

CREATURE: FOOL. YOU’RE WEAKER THAN I EXPECTED

Panel 5

The Professor and Snowfall both looking shocked and about in surprise, assuming defensive positions

PROFX: BY GOD

SNOWFALL: MORE OF THEM

Page 5

Panel 1

The Professor and Snowfall surrounded by a massive pack of wolf beasts, THE wolfbeast is closer to our heroes in advance of the pack. Both heroes still in defensive stances, guarding each other’s back, astral weapons ready.

PROFX: IT WAS ONLY BUYING TIME

SNOWFALL: THERE ARE SO MANY

Panel 2

The wolfbeast, behind it the pack, all savage/feral, even more pack beasts arriving/visible

WOLFBEAST: THE CHILD WAS SIMPLY FOOD

SFX(multiple): GRRRRRRRRRRR

Panel 3

The professor, serene, his sword glinting, behind him Snowfall is watching his back. The Wolf beasts are drawing nearer

PROFESSOR: YES I’VE WONDERED FOR SOME TIME WHY THERE ARE SO FEW TELEPATHS IN THE WORLD BUT NOW I KNOW. YOU AND YOUR KIND HUNT THEM DON’T YOU? CHILDREN TOO WEAK TO RESIST YOU

WOLFBEAST: YOUR ENLIGHTENMENT WILL BE SHORT LIVED

Panel 4

The professor and snowfall holding hands, becoming pure energy, their weapons gone, the Wolf Beast uncertain/backing up

PROFESSOR: ONCE DISCOVERED BY AN ADULT THOUGH. TOO WEAK TO KILL ME ALONE YOU HAD TO GATHER YOUR PACK TO ENSURE YOUR SECRET WAS SAFE

WOLFBEAST: YOU. YOU KNEW. YOU ALLOWED US TO GATHER. TO DRAW US IN..

Panel 5

The Professor/Snowfall becoming a psionic nuke, fleeing wolfbeasts being shredded/vaporised

Panel 6

The professor and snowfall standing in the clearing, lots of melted snow, all that remains of the pack are shadows in the ground. Snow is falling heavily now

SNOWFALL: I THOUGHT IT WAS JUST ONE. HOW DID YOU KNOW ABOUT THE OTHERS?

PROFX: I DIDN’T UNTIL IT HIT MY SHIELD. THEN I KNEW EVERYTHING

SNOWFALL: IS IT OVER?

PROFX: FOR A TIME AT LEAST. I’LL SPREAD THE WORD TO OTHERS LIKE US. WE’LL BE WATCHING FOR THEM NOW.

[manyflushes]

"The one who could not see."

"The one who could not see."

Page One

Panel One:

Black Panther (BP) running toward the reader fast with a fallen tree lying upon the foreground.

Caption: Wikanda, 2011.
SFX: Hooff Hooff Hoooff

Panel Two:

A mid-air jump over the tree. Action shot.

SFX: Huuuuff!

Panel Three:

A back shot of "BP" landing on the ground with his arms spread out flat, and landing on one knee.

SFX: Oomff

Panel Four:

With blurred lines for a backdrop we see "BP's" leg's caught in a running motion.

SFX: Hoof Hoof Hoof

Panel Five:

A slanted birds eye view of "BP" now out of what was the forest and onto cleared ground. A hospital of medium size is in the distance with a shot of the sun setting.

Black Panther Caption: Yes, Xavier. I know your team has failed, and you as well. I will succeed.


Page Two

Panel One:

Close up on "BP's" gloved hand sliding a key card into the door lock.

Caption: 3:00am

Panel Two:

Looking past "BP" in the doorway we can see staff. Some cowering down. Others holding their ears.

SFX: YEEAAHHH!

Panel Three:

Close up on "BP" yelling.

"BP": I'm going to have to move everyone outside the building. Come on people. This is not a drill.

Panel Four:

"BP" inching torward a darkened cell as staff run holding the ears past him.

SFX: Yeeeaahhh!

Panel Five:

An angry look on "BP's" face as he puts on earplugs.

-no dialogue-

Panel Six:

Upper body shot of "BP" grasping the cell's bars with a wicked smile on his face.

"BP": Long time no see, Banshee.


Page Three

Panel One:

Shot from Banshee in restraints on a bed looking up at Black Panther "BP" now entering the cell.

"BP": You don't look well.

Panel Two:

Close up on "BP".

"BP": I'm here to help. It's come to my attention that you've battled the master of magnetism, and won.

Panel Three:

A shot of Banshee's face. Attention on the eye's. Bloodshot and tired. Mouth raging with adrenaline, and some sweat dripping from his brow.

Banshee: If he's dead then why IS HE right THERE!

Panel Four:

Struggling to move, and motioning to Black Panther as to say, "why am i restrained" Banshee yells.

Banshee: And why am i RESTRAINED?!

Panel Five:

With Black Panther at his bedside talking, and Banshee trying hard to kick and free himself a distorted Magneto has bent the cell bars, and is floating inward.

"BP": You are restrained at the request of Proffesor X.

Banshee: HE'S going to KILL us BOTH! LET ME GO!


Page Four

Panel One:

Looking over Black Panther's shoulders is a shot of Magneto's hands around Banshee's neck. Banshee is terrified.

"BP": Banshee? Have you ever heard the story of the boy who could not see?

Panel Two:

"BP" telling a story using his arms and facial features.

"BP": Smart kid. One problem! He could not see how much he loved the world. He would not let it out of his sight.

Panel Three:

Close up on Banshee's open eye.

"BP" Caption: He loved it so much that he never slept. He had to be awake for every single moment.

Panel Four:

Black Panther crouches down pointing/motioning at Banshee. Magneto (distorted) with one hand around Banshee's neck and the other going to punch.

"BP": The point is the boy went mad. He saw things that turned his world upside down. He was like you!

Panel Five:

A close up shot of "BP" whispering into Banshee's ear.

"BP": I'm here to fix what no one else can fix. I'm going to fix the boy...The boy who could not see.


Page Five

Panel One:

Foreground: The back of Banshee's head tilted up looking at Black Panther who is clenching his fist.

"BP": Shall we begin?

Panel Two:

"BP" punches Banshee in the head jilting his face to the side. Banshee's eyes closed.

SFX: Krakk!

Panel Three:

Medium close up on Banshee who looks rested having just been punched.

-No Dialogue-

Panel Four:

Close up on Black Panther speaking. A shadowy figure (BP).

"BP" Caption: Now the boy who could not see will wake and forget the dark side of love.

Panel Five:

"BP" closing Banshee's cell gate with his back to us is about to make his way down the hall to the front door.

"BP" Caption: We will meet again.

Panel Six:

A medium distant shot of Black Panther leaning against the open front door looking up at the moon.


The End

Note: I wanted to post the story. I still have to figure out how to pin on a pic and the wikipedia. I don't think i can vote, but thanks for reading anyway. -MF

[cbikle]

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