Comic cover.

[Chiboy!]

Almost done. It's really hard. Shoulda' planned better, I admit.

[jedi34567]

Yeah, just because it's digital means I can automatically change the position of her head with a click of the mouse, without, you know, having to redraw any of it because the computer will do everything for me.

Sorry, perhaps I have to explain how traditional drawing tools work. If this had been pencilled, inked, and colored on the same sheet of bristol, then you would have had to white out a large area of the drawing, re-pencil, re-ink, and re-color and hope that your new colors don't create a glaring mismatch with the older colors because they were applied over a whited out area.

In digital, you can simply REDRAW THE HEAD.

[Toddoss]

I say draw another shark guy in the foreground on the left getting BLOWN in half by the wobblies and then she has a reason not to look at the other guy.

[Chiboy!]

Yeah, just because it's digital means I can automatically change the position of her head with a click of the mouse, without, you know, having to redraw any of it because the computer will do everything for me.

[jedi34567]

Yes, I agree she might have excellent peripheral vision. :-)

However, her head is not oriented toward the threat. If a tiger sprang out of the bushes at you, you would be looking right at it, not out of the corner of your eye.

This is digital, right? Change the orientation of her head and let us have a look. In addition, I just noticed that she really isn't directing her "wobbly line" power at the beast, either.

[Chiboy!]

She doesn't have pupils though, so how do you know she's not looking at the sharkguy?

[jedi34567]

Now with the rest of the context, it really doesn't make sense to not have her look at the shark guy. The cover looks completely disjointed because she is looking "offscreen" and not at the threat. And because it is a cover, you can't assume the reader has any previous knowledge (like she's blind or something). It will just look "wrong" and discourage people from being attracted to it.

[kae_ae]

I can see why guys are being critical. The linework is excellent (albeit lacking line weight variety) marred by composition that could be improved.

My comment would be the work is generally competent but not very exciting. And considering covers are supposed to be exciting, i would personally rethink the composition at the concept stage rather than trying to fix it in parts. This scene could be drawn from multiple angles and a good exercise is drawing thumbnails to see which angle is the best, rather than jumping straight into drawing a detailed piece.

[SHAMWOW!]

Loston

there should be a drawing contest to see who can draw the most tangents...

[pencilartist]

Its really nice coloring, but still the cover doesn't make since. The concept of a comic book cover is to convey what the comic is about. I don't get what this comic would be about.

[KrisDiaz]

she reminds me of a typical chick. Posing for a picture rather than paying attention to whats going on

[Chiboy!]

k, i moved the shark guy around and got rid of the tangent, or so i think. added the bg elements as well.

[Bruce Lee]

I really like the drawing itself. Nice crisp lines.

I don't really know what else you're going to be adding to the image, but I definitely agree that the interaction between the two characters here is strange. Would make much more sense to have the woman looking down at the shark-dude.

Other than that, you also have a tangent forming with her ankle and foot and the creature's chin and jaw.

My thoughts exactly. These characters don't seem to be interacting to each other. It's sort of weird. I would think the girl would be reacting to the creature more via her body language and expression. Right now, she almost seems unaware that the monster is at her feet at all. It's indeed odd. The girl should be looking down at the threat instead of out at the reader.

The tangent thing is pretty troubling also. It would be better to have the female figure floating above the creature here than to have the woman's foot butting up against the contour lines of the monster in this manner. Try to avoid tangents whenever you can because they create visual distraction and often diminish depth in a drawing. I don't know if you've seen Bret Blevins' illustrations regarding tangents and line-ups, but in case you're unfamiliar with what a "tangent" might be, Bret sums them up pretty well here:



Loston

[dfbovey]

I really like the drawing itself. Nice crisp lines.

I don't really know what else you're going to be adding to the image, but I definitely agree that the interaction between the two characters here is strange. Would make much more sense to have the woman looking down at the shark-dude.

Other than that, you also have a tangent forming with her ankle and foot and the creature's chin and jaw.

[FIG]

I love the lineart, it seems like the heroine is surprised that she is arriving somewhere where there are sharkmen ready to eat her but shes not concerned as shes about to blast them full of her power. Almost like shes saying "Where did these Sharkmen come from? Ah well I will make short work of them with my power." I love the detail as well. Nicely drawn