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[neilchenierart]

Hello All. I've got it figured out now. Here are a few pages to check out. Any pointers would be great.

[PencilVillian]

I can't stand the females lips but other than that these are really nice. That second page is very nice.

[Tim Wellman]

I'd agree about the lips... you've out-Turnered Michael Turner :-) The shape is OK, but they're too big. Speaking of Turner, you do seem to show a lot of influence in the female characters... you might want to find someone better to use as an influence :-) Their elongated, skinny shapes, big tits, and long necks don't really match your male characters.

But these pages are nicely rendered, nice anatomy on the guys, just drop the Turner-esque girls.

[Politik]

I can't stand the females lips but other than that these are really nice. That second page is very nice.

yeah the lips are kinda big... but i like it.

[neilchenierart]

Thank you. Looks like i'm going to have to tone down my lips.

[neilchenierart]

I'd agree about the lips... you've out-Turnered Michael Turner :-) The shape is OK, but they're too big. Speaking of Turner, you do seem to show a lot of influence in the female characters... you might want to find someone better to use as an influence :-) Their elongated, skinny shapes, big tits, and long necks don't really match your male characters.

But these pages are nicely rendered, nice anatomy on the guys, just drop the Turner-esque girls.

I'ts wierd. I own MAYBE 3 of Michael Turners books out of two or three thousand, and my influences include JimLee (obviously), DavidFinch(huge fan), OlivierCoipel, and J.ScottCampbell, but I've heard the MichaelTurner thing before, I just can't figure out how my style has emulated his when i don't use his stuff as reference? But I won't disagree with you. So tone down the lips and tone down the tits, Gotcha.
Thanks Tim.

[PencilVillian]

I'ts wierd. I own MAYBE 3 of Michael Turners books out of two or three thousand, and my influences include JimLee (obviously), DavidFinch(huge fan), OlivierCoipel, and J.ScottCampbell, but I've heard the MichaelTurner thing before, I just can't figure out how my style has emulated his when i don't use his stuff as reference? But I won't disagree with you. So tone down the lips and tone down the tits, Gotcha.
Thanks Tim.

That is very weird. Especially since your females torso structure is very reminiscent to Turner's and not any of the others. Oh and just because me and some others don't like the lips or something else doesn't necessarily mean that you HAVE to change it. Just take it into consideration and if it's something that you feel needs to be changed or scaled up/down then do so. I'm sure no one here, no matter how much they give critiques, wants to limit a persons artistic growth into their eventual/constantly evolving style. Make sense?

EDIT:
Granted we only see one page of your female characters.

[acosby]

count me in as voting for new lip work.
Also the shoulder of your guy leaning forward in the topleft panel of the last page is a little odd. needs to be dropped down and jut out farther. looks really unnatural.

The waves also look too symmetrical, but I can't give you any useful advice on how to do it better because mine are worse than yours. I just know they don't look quite right.
too even in the first one and too much like grass in the second page.

Over all I do like your stuff. I'm just giving you the crits.

[godchicken]

Looks great! I won't say anything about the lips as they've been discussed enough already, but a minor problem I have is in that long vertical panel on the 2nd page: the couple closest in the foreground and the couple directly behind them look almost identical only with different hair styles. It might not bother me as much if there wasn't the similar girl directly behind the girl and the similar guy behind the guy. Perhaps swap the positions of the guy and the girl of the second couple... or you might change that jaw of one of the guys and the expression on the mouth of one of the girls (I think that's what gets me thinking they look alike). Of course, for all I know, in the story they are brothers and the girls are sisters... in which case, good work!