BADGE NUMBER- my recent commission work

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suspense short story written by Paul Allor for Comics Anthology, art by me:

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Thanks for looking.
C & C are always welcome, especially from areas where I lack.

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[Bryan E.Warner]

So the guy is hesitating opening the door?...I'm not sure I'm getting his expressions in page 2 and 3 he's suddenly Mad then Scared then Scared to really Mad.
The Cop kicks the door Open and after a brief talk walks right to the Dead Girl.( how did he know ) and now our Character is freaked out again...and as the cop appears to be leaving he also looks like he could be guilty
it's probably me but I found these a bit confusing..
Your Art though is pretty darn good.

[Toddoss]

Your faces are an interesting mix between a western and eastern style. I would work on your noses some of the times they come off looking pigish. Everything look very competant structure wise. Each panel works well but I have to agree with Bryan Warner that I get confused. Your storytelling needs to gel a bit smoother. Its hard to say how without knowing the script your working with.