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  • BIG F'en Giant Robot Action(Final)

    here is my final entry for the drawoff.
    C&C welcome and thanks for looking.
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  • #2
    man thats ALOT of detail!! your mechanical drawings are always spot on.
    Damn and i thought i had talent

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    • #3
      Very ambitious man!

      I think the one thing that would really help this image is line weight variation to help separate the elements out a bit, create focal points and a better sense of depth. Colors would obviously help in that regard too (or ink wash).
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      • #4
        Tip, take a photography class. While there is a lot of detail and it all looks good. When I look at it I have a problem seeing anything worthwhile to that detail. A simple remedy would be to use line changes more effectively to bring out those things you want people to focus on.

        By taking a photography class it will help teach you how to adjust focus which is done by blurring and making things clearer. This way, even though the objects are in the picture they don't take as much importance. To me all you're pieces give everything in the picture the same amount of importance rather than giving the focus to the two robots in the picture.

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        • #5
          This is definitely a very cool scene, but you are making us work kinda hard to process it and separate the elements.

          The main issue with it is that the robots blend in with the buildings and just about everything else. Maybe some line weight variation will help with that, like David suggested, but you may need to take it further.

          One thing that could help you is to plan out the composition in advance so that you have some areas of detail surrounded by plain areas. As a test, if you squint your eyes looking at a drawing, you should still be able to make out the main shapes quite clearly, even when the detail gets lost. If I squint / cross my eyes when I look at this piece, everything starts to blend together.

          Keep it up, I like the effort you put into your work!

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          • #6
            Spectacular piece, but yeah, very hard to read. So yes, I'll echo what the others have said, use linewidth variation, and also think of your image in terms of hierarchy, what do you want us to see first, waht are the main shapes, what is in the Foreground, middleground, etc. All this planning should help you build up your image with more clarity.
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            • #7
              Thank you all for taking the time to crit this .I will try and use the tips giving on my next piece.those are some very valid
              points on the blurring,and blending together of it all.
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              • #8
                You need to have more heavy blacks to define the shapes in your page design...Use blacks to separate elements and lead the viewers eye...If you held this pic up at arms length you will see that the only thing that attracts your attention are the black blobs of the background.

                Things far in the background become more gray and lose color with distance...save the bold blacks for the foreground and mellow out the solid blacks the background elements.

                Vary your line weights to add depth....foreground objects have thicker outlines and as things recede, the lines thin out.


                Nice!


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                • #9
                  Thanks again for the tips.This is a quick color job.I printed
                  it 8x11 then colored it with clor pencils.
                  so let me know if on the right track guys.
                  thanks for looking
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                  • #10
                    Originally posted by Jel View Post
                    ... and also think of your image in terms of hierarchy, what do you want us to see first, waht are the main shapes, what is in the Foreground, middleground, etc. All this planning should help you build up your image with more clarity.
                    This is so true and so important. Great advice. An image needs to read quickly. The main objective is to be clean, clear, and to show the reader exactly what is going on as fast as possible.

                    Major props for seeing it through and laying in some color. The amount of detail is great.
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                    • #11
                      Haha you are my fuggin hero, Steve!!!!
                      PUMMEL: 1 Win | 0 Losses | 1 KO

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                      • #12
                        Originally posted by lost-spartan View Post
                        Haha you are my fuggin hero, Steve!!!!
                        Thanks Todd and adultbraces I just thought i'd give it it a shot.
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