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  • I Saw Mommy Kissing Santa Claus

    Not that I'll get (m)any replies, but here's my take on the song I Saw Mommy Kissing Santa Claus.



    So, yeah, here's to hoping I get some crits this time. Not to undermine the fine people here, but I mean, it's kinda frustrating when I get seventy some-odd views and no replies, ya know? My work is far from perfect, and I came here for advice & guidance, but it's far and few between.

    Okay, I'm done whining now.
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    I would give advice mang, but I cant see the image.. my work is blocking it.
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    • #3
      Comp is too off centred. Assymetry is okay but you need to balance it.

      Dont mimd the no replies dude. It happens.
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      • #4
        Yeah, I think you could use some more pointers in composition. Look up the Rule of Thirds, and Golden Proportion, the interwebs has tons of info so just google those terms and have a look around.
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        • #5
          IMO, if you cropped the stairs/wall a bit and put something on the wall (i.e. family photos/ wallpaper design) it'd help your piece. I like the style though.
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          • #6
            without seeing the image andn hearing the crits. you want to check out design elements, design principles and creating focal points using desing basics.
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            • #7
              Thanks guys. This one was really difficult to draw, and I have a feeling the composition had a lot to do with it. In fact, I felt there was something off while I was drawing it, but I couldn't put my finger on it, and I needed to get it done so I just went ahead and finished. I'll definitely take a closer look into these things. Thanks again!
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              • #8
                Colour-wise - was there a reason that you chose to colour everything blue? For me, it makes the image feel cold -- when the xmas subject matter and roaring fire in the background are suggesting that we should be getting a 'cosy' vibe off the colours instead.

                Because the blue tones are limited - the various elements of the image lacks a bit of depth - the various elements blend together a bit too easily - and the viewer has to 'look around the image' to to find out whats going on. There's quite a direct message in what you're trying to convey - and i think it should be more immediately apparent. I hope that makes sense? Try experimenting with different ideas. As an initial idea - I'd suggest that you could have coloured the boy and the wall to the left in the dark blue you've chosen - santa and the mother in light blue tones - and then the left the detail on the back wall (the fireplace and mirror etc) as black (non-coloured) lineart. That would be a simple tool to establish foreground - midground and background - and give the elements in each of those 3 clear areas their own, clear identity. I think it would improve the depth of the image.

                I think you should have avoided cropping the top of santa's head.

                Anyway.....as an example....here's the image in a warmer tone -- and I've removed the colour from the background elements. I really think that santa and the mother stand out more as a focus for the image. This is by no means how I'm saying the picture should absolutely positively look -- its just a visual example of what I've rambled about above. Hope it all makes sense.....

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                • #9
                  Thanks Beastie, I see what you mean.

                  Lately, I've been trying out this monochrome thing because a) I'm bad at colouring, and b) it appeals to my sense of minimalism. The only reason I chose blue was because, as far as pens go, they're the only ones I have that work correctly. I bought a pack of red pens with varying shades just like the blue ones, but they only go from pink to burgundy; not really the warm colours I'd have liked.

                  Anyway, I think I'm gonna stick with black & white for now while I practise my colouring. Thanks again.
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                  • #10
                    somebody mentioned it and an easy fix is to add a pic frame on the stair wall to balance things out.

                    or insert wallpaper pattern.

                    the prob here is the subject (mommy kissing santa) should be at or near the focal/centre. also this comp might work better in portrait than in landscape.
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                    • #11
                      Gotcha. I'll take all of these things into account next time. Thanks again everyone! I promise I won't be such a butch the next time I start a thread. :P
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