Writing Contest #17 - Variations on a Them - Page 2

PianoRoll · 09-29-2006, 04:29 PM

When is the earliest we should post our entries?

IronSyndicate · 09-30-2006, 07:05 AM

About 3 and a half seconds after you finish typing them up...

i.e. There is no "earliest" date. Post 'em when they're ready...

banshee · 10-04-2006, 08:12 PM

(nudges this up)... IronS, u advertise this on the bulletin board?

Vivat_Rex · 10-04-2006, 08:16 PM

I'll post a story.

IronSyndicate · 10-05-2006, 05:30 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by banshee

(nudges this up)... IronS, u advertise this on the bulletin board?

Yep, 5 minutes after I poseted the contest up....

http://www.penciljack.com/forum/showthread.php?t=71645

Just bumped it up....

banshee · 10-05-2006, 08:16 AM

thanks IronS.. I've actually started writing something hehehe.. lets see if I get to finish it.. by sat..

IronSyndicate · 10-05-2006, 08:22 AM

In the immortal words of Dennis Dennis III - Boo-Ha!

I now have Banshee under my contest organizing sway! The world is MINE!!!

I'm hoping to also get something up... but real life keeps getting in the way...

banshee · 10-06-2006, 08:13 AM

LOL IronS u funny creature...

OK

After a long hiatus.. here's my entry.. Don't laugh at me too much!
______________

Banshee's Entry:

TITLE: Hell has no fury like Little Red….
BY: ANGELIA ONG

Page 1

Panel 1- The scene opens up in a heavily wooded forest. It has recently rained. You see the tail end of a red cape disappearing (right of panel) and a set of muddy footprints but don’t actually see any person.

CAPTION-IT HAS BEEN FOREWRITTEN THAT I MUST KEEP THESE FORESTS SAFE…

Panel 2- Flashback to a cosy room (low beams, thatch roof) with a roaring fire. It’s fairly spartan, wooden table, chairs and partial view of a bed.. Looks very homey.

CAPTION- IT IS MY HERITAGE..

Panel 3- a large wolf with glowing red eyes is feasting on the lower half of an eldery female body with a nightcap on her white curls and long sleeved nightgown lying on the bed from above scene. It’s blood and carnage everywhere.

CAPTION- TO KILL THOSE WHO PREY ON THE OLD AND HELPLESS..

Panel 4- we see the same wolf now cut into two with an axe sticking out from his throat. Blood everywhere. Strange blue smoke escaping from the wounds.

CAPTION- A WOODCUTTER’S AXE WOULD BE THE TRADITIONAL WEAPON OF CHOICE FOR ONE SUCH AS I… MAXIMUM DAMAGE, MINIMUM EFFORT…

Panel 5- A fresh grave with a simple headstone with “Granny” on it. On top of this headstone lies the bloodied nightcap and a folded red hooded cap on top of the grave.

CAPTION- BUT SOMETIMES I ARRIVE TOO LATE TO SAVE THE VICTIMS OF THIS EVIL..

Page 2

Panel 1- We see the blue smoke from the quartered wolf from the previous panel gathering to form a particular humanoid shape.

CAPTION- THERE ARE MANY OF MY KIND WHO HAVE TRIED TO FIND WAYS TO RID OUR FORESTS OF THIS RECURRING SCURGE..

Panel 2- An wolf-like human with elongated fangs and glowing eyes finally emerges from the smoke.

CAPTION- BUT WITHOUT MUCH SUCCESS…

Panel 3- (large) The terrifying sight of the wolf creature, snarling, as it attempts to tear down the door to a peasant’s cottage.

CAPTION- AND SO WE START OVER AGAIN…

Page 3

Panel 1/2/3- Split panels (into 3), 3 different grannies faces frozen in fear.

CAPTION- MORE LIVES LOST…

Page 4

Panel 1- We see the Wolf creature inside another cosy cottage, a granny feebly holding out a burning torch in front of her, as if to ward off this crazed creature.

GRANNY- SHOO! SHOO!
WOLF- [GROWL] FOOLISH WOMAN…

Panel 2- We see a woodcutter’s axe flying through the air, its sharp metal blade glinting in the light..

SFX- phfftttt…………

Panel 3-the wolf creature is cut across the neck, clean into two..

CAPTION- BUT NOT THIS TIME…..

Panel 4- The granny (over our shoulder view) is looking grateful as the wolf;s body is being dragged out her front door.

CAPTION- I WILL PUT A STOP TO THIS SENSELESS CARNAGE..

Panel 5- Again the blue smoke dissipating around the snarling wolf creature stepping over the wolf body.

Page 5

Panel 1- the wolf is shocked by a swinging sword blade bathed in a red glow, moves to avoid it.

Panel 2- The wolf is in mid leap towards (its back to us) a small shadowy figure in a hooded cloack holding the glowing red sword.

WOLF-[GROWL] YOU CANNOT KILL ME…

Panel 3- The wolf;s chest has been pierced through with the glowing sword, flames are all around the wound..

WOLF-.. WHAT.. MANNER OF WEAPON IS THIS…

Panel 4- We now see the shadowy figure in a red cloak removing the hood, revealing a beautiful young girl (around 12 years old) with brown hair and cold brown eyes.

GIRL- A SWORD OF FIRE… HURTS DOESN’T IT?

Panel 5- the wolf is being consumed by the flames.. The young girl looks coldly at the burning flesh, unmoved.

WOLF- AAAAAAAHHHH… WHO.. ARE… YOU…

Panel 6- (small) close of the coldly smiling young girl.

GIRL- THEY CALL ME… LITTLE RED….

Panel 7- the young girl still smiling coldly as she pulls out the flaming sword from the dead wolf…

GIRL- AND I DON’T NEED NO WOODCUTTER TO SAVE ME FROM A WOLF..

-Fin-

Cuddly · 10-06-2006, 08:19 AM

Bravo! [applauds] Very nicely done!

Vivat_Rex · 10-06-2006, 06:18 PM

Human Skin

Page 1

Panel-1: Wide panel of a little blond haired girl looking at us directly. She is sleeping on her side on her bed at night. She has her eyes wide open with fear. Her red blanket is pulled over most of her body. The focus of the panel should be on her face. There is a faint, yellowish light that cuts across the panel from a slightly opened door from the little girl.

Caption: If I close my eyes, I won’t see the wolf.

(Pane-2 and panel-3 are the same size)

Panel-2: A close up on her face. The eyes are turning up (she is sleeping on the side of her face). The yellowish light is getting a little stronger. That should be a coloring effect.

Caption: I am afraid to close my eyes.

Panel-3: Similar panel as the last one except the girl’s eyes are now looking at us directly. She has her red blanket pulled over her head, covering up most of her face. She is showing only her eyes and a small patch of her face. The eyes are almost about to close, but she is reluctant to do so. That is a hard effect, but the emphasis needs to be conveyed. The yellowish light is now a lot stronger. It lights up the whole blanket in a thick gleam.

Caption: But, I am afraid to keep them open too.

(Panel-4 is bigger than panel-5)

Panel-4: The panel is framed by an open door. In the middle ground is a dark, blurry figure that resembles a wolf. In the background is the girl’s bed. We see her profile in the blanket. She is small and curled up. The whole panel should be lit in a yellow light. We will see it as the light flooding inside the room.

Panel-5: We see the bed from the other side. The little girl has the red blanket pulled over her face. In the background is a blurry pair of hands that resemble a wolf’s paws.

Page 2

(Panel-1 is bigger than panel-2)
Panel-1: This panel resembles panel-5 from the previous page. The little girl’s blanket is over her body. It is the morning now and the natural light is flooding the room. The door behind her bed is closed. The camera should be zoomed out so we see the bed and the door behind it.

Caption: I never sleep.

Panel-2: We see a zoom in on the girl’s bed. The red blanket is pulled up slightly to reveal a thin slice of her face. Her eyes are puffy and red.

(Panel-3, 4, 5 are long vertical panels and are the same size)

Panel-3: The bed is empty and unmade. It is in the foreground and the little girl is fixing it. She is grabbing a corner and tucking it in. We do not need to see everything here. The action is quick, and we will only see partial aspects of her and the environment.

Panel-4: She is brushing her teeth and has her back to us. In the mirror we see her eyes. She is small so she is on her toes as she brushes her teeth. We will need maybe an overhead shot or a three-quarter overhead.

Panel-5: She is dressed and sitting in front of a plate of what looks like a plate of bacon. She has on a red coat with a hood. Underneath, she has on a white shirt and jeans and black shoes. We will not see most of it, but just in case. In the foreground is a profile of a man putting down another helping of meat down on her plate. We will not see much of his body. We need to see the hands and the bowel he is holding. The focus is on the girl and her eyes as she looks up at him.

Panel-6: A reverse of the last panel. She has her back to us now. She is hiding her hands under the table and throwing away the meat into her school bag. She may be looking down slightly, tilting her head and looking up at the same time.

Page 3

(Panel-1 is smaller than panel-2)

Panel-1: The little girl has her head tilted to the side of a school desk. She has her hands down beneath the table and is looking away from the camera. She is tired and her eyes are puffy with bags. She has her jacket on.

Panel-2: A reverse of panel-1. We see the line of students a teacher walking up to us from the little girl’s aisle. The teacher is dressed in shirt, tie and pants. He is of average build, bald, a little paunchy but solid. The little girl is the only one with a jacket on.

Mr. Hunter: Robin. Robin, do you know the answer?

Panel-3: This is a wide panel. We are looking down from the teacher’s shoulder as Robin looks up at us, lost. She has her mouth open and her eyes are wide.

Robin: No, Mr. Hunter.
Mr. Hunter: See me after school, Robin. We need to talk.

Panel-4: This will be a wide panel. The class room is empty except for the girl. She is sitting in her desk alone. Mr. Hunter is standing before her. We see it from a zoomed out angle behind her, but can see Mr. Hunter’s face.

Mr. Hunter: Robin, you are a good student, but for the last few months, you just seem lost
Is everything ok at home?
Girl: Yes.

Page 4

(Panel-1, 2, 3 are nearly the same size)

Panel-1: We are looking up behind the little girl’s head as Mr. Hunter talks to her. He has his hands out, open and inviting, trying to get her to talk to him.

Mr. Hunter: How is your grandfather?

Robin: Good.

Panel-2: We are looking up at Mr. Hunter as he reaches and touches the little girl’s jacket arm. He looks down at her with suspicion. His eyes should be really concerned.

Mr. Hunter: Why don’t you take your jacket off Robin? The heat is on in here.

Girl: No!

Panel-3: The little girl snaps her arm back, revealing three blue marks on them. We do not see much of it, but only a faint suggestion. Her face is scared and she looks down at her arm. The teacher’s shadow falls on her so the arm is obscured.

Mr. Hunter (off camera): That is ok. You can keep it on. Robin, your grandfather…is he always home?

Robin: Yes.

Panel-4 is bigger than panel-5)

Panel-4: The teacher is kneeling down, looking directly into the little girl’s eyes. His hands are resting on the desk. We see this from a side angle, but not necessarily from a side profile. The little girl has her head lowered slightly, trying to avoid the gaze of the teacher. She has little bits of sweat forming.

Mr. Hunter: Robin, where is…your grandmother?

Robin: She went away on a vacation.

Panel-5: A zoom in on the girl’s face as she turns her head slightly, her eyes are looking to the right. She is sweating as she speaks. The heat and the jacket are working her over. The panel has a touch of a red filter as she panics.

Robin: Mr. Hunter, I have to go home. I need to go now!

Mr. Hunter: Ok. I can drive you back. Let me just make a phone call first, ok?

Robin: Ok…

Page 5

Panel-1: A wide panel of a half-lit road. The sun is setting and the trees and all the shadows stretch out. In the foreground, there is a red Toyota with Mr. Hunter and the little girl in the passenger seat.

(Panel-2, 3, 4 are the same size)

Panel-2: An overhead zoom out of the red car on the road. Two police cars are pulling in fast from behind.

Panel-3: The police cars are in foreground and the red car is in the background.

Panel-4: We are inside the red car as we see the police cars parked outside of the little girl’s house. Mr. Hunter is looking intently into the windshield. The little girl is straining against the seat belt.

Mr. Hunter: Robin, wait in the car.

Panel-5: Mr. Hunter is talking to a police officer. The officer is big and wide. He is holding a clipboard and filling out a report. There are lights blinking and a few officers in the background. The police car in the background has the grandfather in a wolf costume, sitting in the back, cuffed. The costume is just fur and a wolf skin’s head over his down bald head, resting on the forehead.

Police Officer: Yeah, you were right. We came in on to check on the old man. What a creep. Don’t know what he was doing in the costume. He jumped one of my officers.

Panel-6: We see only the hands of the officer and Mr. Hunter as they talk. In this panel we see a close up of the grandfather in the wolf costume, looking at us with a dead calm.

Mr. Hunter: I’m just glad I went on my hunch.

Officer: Yeah. The grandmother, he cut her up. Had her stacked down in the cellar. Don’t know how long. Poor little girl, she had to come home to this for how long?

09-30-2006, 07:05 AM	#12
IronSyndicate Member Join Date: Jun 2006 Posts: 320	About 3 and a half seconds after you finish typing them up... i.e. There is no "earliest" date. Post 'em when they're ready... __________________ "Assjay is my X-Men hangover" - Steve Offenheim

10-04-2006, 08:12 PM	#13
banshee Retired Whipcracker Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Malaysia Posts: 3,032	(nudges this up)... IronS, u advertise this on the bulletin board? __________________ Website

10-04-2006, 08:16 PM	#14
Vivat_Rex - - - - - - Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 461	Ok... I'll post a story.

10-05-2006, 08:16 AM	#16
banshee Retired Whipcracker Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Malaysia Posts: 3,032	thanks IronS.. I've actually started writing something hehehe.. lets see if I get to finish it.. by sat.. __________________ Website

10-06-2006, 08:19 AM	#19
Cuddly Nuthin' Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Kuala Lumpur, Malaysia Posts: 1,900	Bravo! [applauds] Very nicely done! __________________ Take care, -dOn- http://www.sheldongoh.com/blog/ http://sheldongoh.deviantart.com/

09-29-2006, 04:29 PM	#11
PianoRoll Neophyte Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Austin, TX Posts: 67	When is the earliest we should post our entries?

10-05-2006, 08:22 AM	#17
IronSyndicate Member Join Date: Jun 2006 Posts: 320	In the immortal words of Dennis Dennis III - Boo-Ha! I now have Banshee under my contest organizing sway! The world is MINE!!! I'm hoping to also get something up... but real life keeps getting in the way... __________________ "Assjay is my X-Men hangover" - Steve Offenheim

10-06-2006, 08:13 AM	#18
banshee Retired Whipcracker Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Malaysia Posts: 3,032	LOL IronS u funny creature... OK After a long hiatus.. here's my entry.. Don't laugh at me too much! ______________ Banshee's Entry: TITLE: Hell has no fury like Little Red…. BY: ANGELIA ONG Page 1 Panel 1- The scene opens up in a heavily wooded forest. It has recently rained. You see the tail end of a red cape disappearing (right of panel) and a set of muddy footprints but don’t actually see any person. CAPTION-IT HAS BEEN FOREWRITTEN THAT I MUST KEEP THESE FORESTS SAFE… Panel 2- Flashback to a cosy room (low beams, thatch roof) with a roaring fire. It’s fairly spartan, wooden table, chairs and partial view of a bed.. Looks very homey. CAPTION- IT IS MY HERITAGE.. Panel 3- a large wolf with glowing red eyes is feasting on the lower half of an eldery female body with a nightcap on her white curls and long sleeved nightgown lying on the bed from above scene. It’s blood and carnage everywhere. CAPTION- TO KILL THOSE WHO PREY ON THE OLD AND HELPLESS.. Panel 4- we see the same wolf now cut into two with an axe sticking out from his throat. Blood everywhere. Strange blue smoke escaping from the wounds. CAPTION- A WOODCUTTER’S AXE WOULD BE THE TRADITIONAL WEAPON OF CHOICE FOR ONE SUCH AS I… MAXIMUM DAMAGE, MINIMUM EFFORT… Panel 5- A fresh grave with a simple headstone with “Granny” on it. On top of this headstone lies the bloodied nightcap and a folded red hooded cap on top of the grave. CAPTION- BUT SOMETIMES I ARRIVE TOO LATE TO SAVE THE VICTIMS OF THIS EVIL.. Page 2 Panel 1- We see the blue smoke from the quartered wolf from the previous panel gathering to form a particular humanoid shape. CAPTION- THERE ARE MANY OF MY KIND WHO HAVE TRIED TO FIND WAYS TO RID OUR FORESTS OF THIS RECURRING SCURGE.. Panel 2- An wolf-like human with elongated fangs and glowing eyes finally emerges from the smoke. CAPTION- BUT WITHOUT MUCH SUCCESS… Panel 3- (large) The terrifying sight of the wolf creature, snarling, as it attempts to tear down the door to a peasant’s cottage. CAPTION- AND SO WE START OVER AGAIN… Page 3 Panel 1/2/3- Split panels (into 3), 3 different grannies faces frozen in fear. CAPTION- MORE LIVES LOST… Page 4 Panel 1- We see the Wolf creature inside another cosy cottage, a granny feebly holding out a burning torch in front of her, as if to ward off this crazed creature. GRANNY- SHOO! SHOO! WOLF- [GROWL] FOOLISH WOMAN… Panel 2- We see a woodcutter’s axe flying through the air, its sharp metal blade glinting in the light.. SFX- phfftttt………… Panel 3-the wolf creature is cut across the neck, clean into two.. CAPTION- BUT NOT THIS TIME….. Panel 4- The granny (over our shoulder view) is looking grateful as the wolf;s body is being dragged out her front door. CAPTION- I WILL PUT A STOP TO THIS SENSELESS CARNAGE.. Panel 5- Again the blue smoke dissipating around the snarling wolf creature stepping over the wolf body. Page 5 Panel 1- the wolf is shocked by a swinging sword blade bathed in a red glow, moves to avoid it. Panel 2- The wolf is in mid leap towards (its back to us) a small shadowy figure in a hooded cloack holding the glowing red sword. WOLF-[GROWL] YOU CANNOT KILL ME… Panel 3- The wolf;s chest has been pierced through with the glowing sword, flames are all around the wound.. WOLF-.. WHAT.. MANNER OF WEAPON IS THIS… Panel 4- We now see the shadowy figure in a red cloak removing the hood, revealing a beautiful young girl (around 12 years old) with brown hair and cold brown eyes. GIRL- A SWORD OF FIRE… HURTS DOESN’T IT? Panel 5- the wolf is being consumed by the flames.. The young girl looks coldly at the burning flesh, unmoved. WOLF- AAAAAAAHHHH… WHO.. ARE… YOU… Panel 6- (small) close of the coldly smiling young girl. GIRL- THEY CALL ME… LITTLE RED…. Panel 7- the young girl still smiling coldly as she pulls out the flaming sword from the dead wolf… GIRL- AND I DON’T NEED NO WOODCUTTER TO SAVE ME FROM A WOLF.. -Fin-

10-06-2006, 06:18 PM	#20
Vivat_Rex - - - - - - Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 461	Human Skin Page 1 Panel-1: Wide panel of a little blond haired girl looking at us directly. She is sleeping on her side on her bed at night. She has her eyes wide open with fear. Her red blanket is pulled over most of her body. The focus of the panel should be on her face. There is a faint, yellowish light that cuts across the panel from a slightly opened door from the little girl. Caption: If I close my eyes, I won’t see the wolf. (Pane-2 and panel-3 are the same size) Panel-2: A close up on her face. The eyes are turning up (she is sleeping on the side of her face). The yellowish light is getting a little stronger. That should be a coloring effect. Caption: I am afraid to close my eyes. Panel-3: Similar panel as the last one except the girl’s eyes are now looking at us directly. She has her red blanket pulled over her head, covering up most of her face. She is showing only her eyes and a small patch of her face. The eyes are almost about to close, but she is reluctant to do so. That is a hard effect, but the emphasis needs to be conveyed. The yellowish light is now a lot stronger. It lights up the whole blanket in a thick gleam. Caption: But, I am afraid to keep them open too. (Panel-4 is bigger than panel-5) Panel-4: The panel is framed by an open door. In the middle ground is a dark, blurry figure that resembles a wolf. In the background is the girl’s bed. We see her profile in the blanket. She is small and curled up. The whole panel should be lit in a yellow light. We will see it as the light flooding inside the room. Panel-5: We see the bed from the other side. The little girl has the red blanket pulled over her face. In the background is a blurry pair of hands that resemble a wolf’s paws. Page 2 (Panel-1 is bigger than panel-2) Panel-1: This panel resembles panel-5 from the previous page. The little girl’s blanket is over her body. It is the morning now and the natural light is flooding the room. The door behind her bed is closed. The camera should be zoomed out so we see the bed and the door behind it. Caption: I never sleep. Panel-2: We see a zoom in on the girl’s bed. The red blanket is pulled up slightly to reveal a thin slice of her face. Her eyes are puffy and red. (Panel-3, 4, 5 are long vertical panels and are the same size) Panel-3: The bed is empty and unmade. It is in the foreground and the little girl is fixing it. She is grabbing a corner and tucking it in. We do not need to see everything here. The action is quick, and we will only see partial aspects of her and the environment. Panel-4: She is brushing her teeth and has her back to us. In the mirror we see her eyes. She is small so she is on her toes as she brushes her teeth. We will need maybe an overhead shot or a three-quarter overhead. Panel-5: She is dressed and sitting in front of a plate of what looks like a plate of bacon. She has on a red coat with a hood. Underneath, she has on a white shirt and jeans and black shoes. We will not see most of it, but just in case. In the foreground is a profile of a man putting down another helping of meat down on her plate. We will not see much of his body. We need to see the hands and the bowel he is holding. The focus is on the girl and her eyes as she looks up at him. Panel-6: A reverse of the last panel. She has her back to us now. She is hiding her hands under the table and throwing away the meat into her school bag. She may be looking down slightly, tilting her head and looking up at the same time. Page 3 (Panel-1 is smaller than panel-2) Panel-1: The little girl has her head tilted to the side of a school desk. She has her hands down beneath the table and is looking away from the camera. She is tired and her eyes are puffy with bags. She has her jacket on. Panel-2: A reverse of panel-1. We see the line of students a teacher walking up to us from the little girl’s aisle. The teacher is dressed in shirt, tie and pants. He is of average build, bald, a little paunchy but solid. The little girl is the only one with a jacket on. Mr. Hunter: Robin. Robin, do you know the answer? Panel-3: This is a wide panel. We are looking down from the teacher’s shoulder as Robin looks up at us, lost. She has her mouth open and her eyes are wide. Robin: No, Mr. Hunter. Mr. Hunter: See me after school, Robin. We need to talk. Panel-4: This will be a wide panel. The class room is empty except for the girl. She is sitting in her desk alone. Mr. Hunter is standing before her. We see it from a zoomed out angle behind her, but can see Mr. Hunter’s face. Mr. Hunter: Robin, you are a good student, but for the last few months, you just seem lost Is everything ok at home? Girl: Yes. Page 4 (Panel-1, 2, 3 are nearly the same size) Panel-1: We are looking up behind the little girl’s head as Mr. Hunter talks to her. He has his hands out, open and inviting, trying to get her to talk to him. Mr. Hunter: How is your grandfather? Robin: Good. Panel-2: We are looking up at Mr. Hunter as he reaches and touches the little girl’s jacket arm. He looks down at her with suspicion. His eyes should be really concerned. Mr. Hunter: Why don’t you take your jacket off Robin? The heat is on in here. Girl: No! Panel-3: The little girl snaps her arm back, revealing three blue marks on them. We do not see much of it, but only a faint suggestion. Her face is scared and she looks down at her arm. The teacher’s shadow falls on her so the arm is obscured. Mr. Hunter (off camera): That is ok. You can keep it on. Robin, your grandfather…is he always home? Robin: Yes. Panel-4 is bigger than panel-5) Panel-4: The teacher is kneeling down, looking directly into the little girl’s eyes. His hands are resting on the desk. We see this from a side angle, but not necessarily from a side profile. The little girl has her head lowered slightly, trying to avoid the gaze of the teacher. She has little bits of sweat forming. Mr. Hunter: Robin, where is…your grandmother? Robin: She went away on a vacation. Panel-5: A zoom in on the girl’s face as she turns her head slightly, her eyes are looking to the right. She is sweating as she speaks. The heat and the jacket are working her over. The panel has a touch of a red filter as she panics. Robin: Mr. Hunter, I have to go home. I need to go now! Mr. Hunter: Ok. I can drive you back. Let me just make a phone call first, ok? Robin: Ok… Page 5 Panel-1: A wide panel of a half-lit road. The sun is setting and the trees and all the shadows stretch out. In the foreground, there is a red Toyota with Mr. Hunter and the little girl in the passenger seat. (Panel-2, 3, 4 are the same size) Panel-2: An overhead zoom out of the red car on the road. Two police cars are pulling in fast from behind. Panel-3: The police cars are in foreground and the red car is in the background. Panel-4: We are inside the red car as we see the police cars parked outside of the little girl’s house. Mr. Hunter is looking intently into the windshield. The little girl is straining against the seat belt. Mr. Hunter: Robin, wait in the car. Panel-5: Mr. Hunter is talking to a police officer. The officer is big and wide. He is holding a clipboard and filling out a report. There are lights blinking and a few officers in the background. The police car in the background has the grandfather in a wolf costume, sitting in the back, cuffed. The costume is just fur and a wolf skin’s head over his down bald head, resting on the forehead. Police Officer: Yeah, you were right. We came in on to check on the old man. What a creep. Don’t know what he was doing in the costume. He jumped one of my officers. Panel-6: We see only the hands of the officer and Mr. Hunter as they talk. In this panel we see a close up of the grandfather in the wolf costume, looking at us with a dead calm. Mr. Hunter: I’m just glad I went on my hunch. Officer: Yeah. The grandmother, he cut her up. Had her stacked down in the cellar. Don’t know how long. Poor little girl, she had to come home to this for how long?

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