Food Page 3
Here's the third page... finally...
Crits welcome, tear it apart. I realize I forgot to add his sideburns but will add em later.
Well, we've made it to the third page.
I keep on expecting the food to turn on the people.
Anyways, the knife here doesn't appear to be right. You could use it for the job, however it looks more like a butter-knife, and the size is more for quick-cut eating than preparing. For cutting loaves I'd go with a larger serrated breading knife.
Totally agree... but again the script calls for "small butter knife." I think because the chef is just testing things out, not really doing any prep work.
How's my perspective shot in panel 1? Man, that took alot out of me. His hand bugs me in the second panel too. I think I will fix that when I fix the chops.
The perspective is just fine in panel 1. I would tweak that hand in panel 2. I'd put it right at the end of his sleeve. Looks a little long where it is currently.
From what I can tell the perspective looks fine, and there's nothing terribly wrong with the hands.
Thanks guys. I'll post the finished page later tonight.
hey, you really stepped up your game, randy.
i love the blur effect on the knife. adds a lot of depth.
speaking of the hand in panel 2: JHKetterer said it all. the hand should definitely come out of the sleeve.
the hand in panel 3 could be slightly bigger. it looks tiny compared to the guy's head (regardless of the perspective).
as far as the perspective in panel 1 goes: it looks ok at first glance but if you look closer you'll see that it's a bit off.
if you follow the blue lines you'll see the vanishing points you used (two point perspective). first problem: they're not on the same horizontal line. and if you check all the other lines from each point (red on the right side and green on the left) you'll see that some of them don't follow the vanishing points:
it pays off to stick to the rules and construct your objects accurately and it's really just a matter of patience.
looking forward to seeing the finished page.
Thanks Vik! That was really helpful. My perspective needs work, I know. Here is the fixed page- still not 100%, but close enough. I'll try some more unusual perspective shots later.
I can't decide which sound effect to use. Should I go with the top one or the bottom one?
It's personal preference, but I like it behind the knife.