Spider-Man WIP...kinda at a loss

[eric_blitz]

I think it looks pretty good so far (I mean for not being cleand up yet) but it seems like its missing something....anyone got any ideas? I'd welcome it.

[alfred183]

First thing that pops out is that Spidey's legs are a little short. Legs are usually as long as the torso. Might also want to give him a pose that suits him more. I can't remember what issue it was, Spidey was talking to a girl and she asked him: "why are you always hanging off walls and crouching?" and he said something like "I feel weird just standing around dressed up like this". Haha, I'm sure I'm remembering that wrong.

Oh, yeah....also might not want to cut off DD's feet. Not sure who's rule it is but I've heard it's a no-no.

Anyway, let's see some more progress!!! Are you going to ink and color? I say push it as far as you can

[eric_blitz]

Thanks! I'm not sure what I can do about Spidey's position since it would change the picture so much. But I will toy with DD. And I'll change Spidey's legs. thanks again! And I plan to ink it once its good enough.

Anyone else have ideas?

[eric_blitz]

Ok, well, my scanner is to small to scan it all (I had to tape on to add DD's feet). So here is what it scanned. Which luckly was the parts I changed. I changed spidey's face slightly, elongated Spidey's legs and added DD's feet (I added his full feet but a small part was cut off) what do you guys think now??

[Telekinetic Ketchup]

hopefully you won't think I'm a douche for doing this (usually it's appreciated but it happens.)



if you're wondering what's up with the black and blue then let me explain, basically I really liked where you were going with the pattern up by Mary Jane (?) and I think you should do that in a sort of X formation bringing all of the characters together.

Btw you'll have to forgive me if this isn't all accurate or I've completely overlooked something it's like 6 AM here and I'm mighty tired.

[eric_blitz]

Wow! Very impressive and much appreciated! This helps alot! Thanks!

[midLfinger]

Three things stand out the most to me, personally.

Spider-Man seems to be going in two places at once. His legs seem to be walking towards the picture's right while his torso seems to be coming at the viewer.

Shocker's pose seems like he's lacking intensity. I think his back could use more of a curve (like he's hunched over). Try standing in front of a mirror and pretending you're Shocker zapping something. You'll see how you lean into the shot with you're upper body. Also, his arms are straight forward yet his shoulders are sloping down. When you do the pose you'll notice that unless your arms are bent at the elbows it is impossible for your shoulders to go lower. Actually, they tend to go higher and become rounder.

Finally, Spider-Man's feet. I'm not great at drawing feet either so I can't give much advice. I can tell you already tried to fix them on your second picture but they still look off.

Other than those things it's looking good. Hope some of this helps you out.

[eric_blitz]

Ok here are the VERY eairly stages. I'm glade I re-did this cause it looks better already.

[eric_blitz]

Well heres how it turned out. I like it! Thanks for all the help!

[Telekinetic Ketchup]

looks alot better man, nice job, I acctually meant you should follow up with the webbing in the entire X though.