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[lakcoo2u]

Its been awhile since I've posted anything here on PJ. Anyways, I've started to work on my sequentials. So here I am looking for some critiques to help me improve. Please be as brutally honest as you can. So other than the lack of background, what else do I need to work on so I can be a better sequential artist. Thanks guys.





- Lak

[Wo-Nellie]

Perhaps give some texture to a few of those straight lines. For instance some wood grain or metallic shine on those tables at the tavern would really help.

[ThrashArt]

reminds me a LOT of star wars

[lakcoo2u]

Wo- Thanks, I didn't think of that. That would've definetly enhanced the images a bit.
Thrash- I felt the Force as well when I read the script lol. The guy who wrote the script actually originally did it as a Bobba Fett sample pages for a friend. The script later replaced Bobba Fett with some made up bounty hunter for use to try out.

- Lak

[ITDGage]

I agree with Nellie that you could use some textures to make it fell more substantial. I would point out that on Page 2 Panel 5 the big guy on the left's head looks flat.

Other than that, these pages look really nice. I really like your spaceship. Is the ring around the planet made of bits and pieces of destroyed spacecraft? If so, that's a pretty cool idea.

[lakcoo2u]

ITDGage - Yeah the stuff around the planet is space junk. I'll be keeping texture in mind the next time I draw something. Maybe his head looks flat cuz his chest overlapped his chin? Thanks

- Lak