wolverine/alien page 2 pencils

[gadgetwk]

Here's my page for the jam. Keep in mind, this is my first sequential in close to 10 years (the last comic I drew was when I was in high school). I've never been one to draw much more than people which is why I got in on this, to try my hand at storytelling and backgrounds and the like.

Also, I realize Wolverine's body in the first panel is kinda tiny. I'm going to make it a bit bigger before I ink it.

[J. Alexopoulos]

I love the way your Wolvie outfit looks. It's sleek, and so are his claws.
Good work all around.

-John

[VicM]

Nice page Gadget. Good idea with making his torso bigger. You may also want to rework his hat, it doesn't really look like a curled edge cowboy hat (Which BTW is pretty difficult to draw from different angle, but it's worth the challenge to learn it)

[Gonzo]

very slick, easy to read, decent proportions. I like it.

My only sticking point is continuity. Where does he take his civilian clothes off at? How does he have the time to do so? When did he put the cowl on? I'm missing a scene.

[gadgetwk]

Thanks guys!

And on the subject of continuity, the script jumps back and forth between whats happening now and what happened to get us there.

[joshpierce]

Just so you know publishers are going to look at the pagination. You don't want the time line to be on the same page. They should be separated to flow better

[Telekinetic Ketchup]

Looks great Gadget

[J. Alexopoulos]

Just so you know publishers are going to look at the pagination. You don't want the time line to be on the same page. They should be separated to flow better

It's my script, so I'm to blame. Since the script was for a jam, with each page done by a different artist, I wanted the give everyone at least a bit of the main fight scene on their page. That way no one would get stuck with a page of talking heads while everyone else had the fun action stuff.


-John