Cellmates

[cs3ink]

I did an 11 page short for my buddy Brock's SuperFogeys Book 3 collection. These are the first 3 pages.

Hope you enjoy, and thanks for taking a look.

Chip

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[ThreeEyesWorm]

I really like the drawing, especially the first two pages. You know I am a big fan. But here's critique. I do enjoy the simplicity in your drawings but I am not sure about the level of simplicity on page 3 though. It seems like there's alot of space which can potentially be utilized for emotion or tell parts of the world through the background. Also, the man's hand gestures on panel 1 and 2 on page 3 seems a bit confusing to me. Why is he doing that while coughing?

I also like the writing for the first two pages. I think the third page has potential. Right now I am a bit confisued as to what's going on but that could be a good thing. It could indicate good implicit story telling. So more pages please!

[cs3ink]

This story killed my fanaski, TEW. It's the first time I've worked from someone else's script, and the first time I'd ever worked a period piece. Most of the issues you have with page 3 are squarely on my shoulders, so I appreciate thae kind words.

As you know, I'll keep at it.

Thanks,
Chip

[cs3ink]

bumpity bumpity?

[ThreeEyesWorm]

Yea I would say this deserves a little bumpy bump. I am surprised no one's commented on it other than me.

what's fanaski?