Reply With QuoteExcellent page Simo! My biggest crit would be panel 1. The door especially and the hallway in general look very small compared to the size of the man.
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A board part of a 5 boards pitch "on hold" (too long to explain).
Excellent page Simo! My biggest crit would be panel 1. The door especially and the hallway in general look very small compared to the size of the man.
Originally Posted by lost-spartan
I totally agree with it. I realized just after the board was done.
I like the panel with the door with the perspective a bit tilted, but the man is a bit too big
Great,great..great!!!!!!
for panel 1,just select guy on photoshop and reduce size of character.
Yeah, more great art from Simone! Beautiful.
My only gripe is that your perspectives seem of in 1 & 3. In 1, the door looks WAY too small, and in 3, the room has little depth and the woman looks like a giant.
Oh, I hope to send you the next scene from Broken soon.
Hope the pitch becomes active again.
Thanks guys!
Chip, welcome to see here again, I sent you a couple of mails and a pm here in PJ...hope you received them. Can't wait to see othr Broken from you. This pitch is frozen (problably for ever), but I have another couple oe already sent in these days and another one in progress
If you sent me anything recently (in the last 2 months or so), I'm pretty sure I didn't get 'em. Sorry.
yeah that is very tight. I love the character. and a simple resize would fix the first panel. nice stuff!
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It's great I love it, keep it up.
I think you might want to flip that first panel - it looks a bit awkward to have him kicking toward the left side of the page, then entering the room immediately after, facing to the right of the page.
Aside from that, and what the others mentioned, it's a really nice page. I especially like the 3rd panel of the tossed room. Good stuff!
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