Fusion Jam: Wolverine vs. Alien

[malachimanson]

so story is solid now we need to pick apart the nit picky things which is the street cloths to costume. The suggestion of The New Xmen look of wolverine is a good one. But I think going with the brown and tan suit is what were looking at. It is a fan favorite.

So Wolverine Johnny in the bar. Drinking a few. Wolverine heads into bathroom sniffs out what he smells. Walks into stall. Face hugger looking for some love. Wolverine slices the shit out of it but its to late drops out cold. Acid blood burns outer layer of cloths.

Johnny pulls Wolverine car. (acid thing has to put into a acid proof contaner in the back seat. Wolverine wakes up. He's confused. His clothing is shreaded. A quick sniff. He smells the xenomorph inside him but he doesn't know. He pulls shirt off slides mask on. Then he feels in tring to get out of him. Ribb cage raises it can't get out that way. So it freaks out ripping its way to the cloests exit it can find the stomach. It clawing biteing its way through. Burts through logan's stomach blood going everywhere.

Johnny screams like a chick. It jets into the sewer. Logan lifeless sitting in the car. Sits up like ouch. Logan "grow a pair" Pulls his guts into stomach takes a swig of booze and starts tracking it.

Now this is paraphrasing it adding some humor into the paraphrasing but you get the picture. Point a Face hugger. Wolverine fighting it off him causes acid onto cloths reason for cloths to be gone and costume to be worn.

[Ugga Bugga]

That would work for me.

[J. Alexopoulos]

w0w! quite the response.

Ok. There seems to be a bit of confusion with the script (I'm guessing my fault) so befor I comment on some of the suggestions (some of which are pretty good) I'll just give a chronological summary of what I was trying to do with the script:

-Reed asks Wolv to help Johnny find some crashed Alien in the vicinity of Hank's Hole.

-Logan naturally wants a couple drinks as they discuss.

-Logan gets facehugged and implanted, and the facehugger rolls off and simply dies

-Wakes up a few minutes later in Johnny's car.

-Chest burst.

-Wolverine jumps out, already his ruined clothes falling off/being removed, revealing the brown/yellow underneath (the mask and cowl are attached to the back of his costume like a hoodie.

- Wolverine hunts his Alien for a couple of hours.

-They start to fight, and Wolv's guts get spilled (P1p1)

-Fight continues.

RE: facehugger and chestburster- those are the names of the Alien during those stages of life according to wikipedia, and who doesn't trust wikipedia? The site includes a couple of photos. A google search will give you even more great photos. I'm assuming we'll post some ref photos for the artists.

RE: bursting through the chest- I suggest that it pops out directly below the sternum, at the costal arch, but note that ribs only run about halfway to the sternum along the anterior aspect of the body; at that point they become costal cartilage, which I'm assuming isn't infused with adamantium (like his nose and ears.)



Suggestions I like: I like thae whiskey bottle idea as well as Logan dying momentarily in the car. I'm not sure if I can rework the panel count to include it, but I'll try.

I also think I can clarify the costume issue. I'll have another draft up soon.

And Ugga ("Are you upset you volunteered yet Mr. Alexopoulos?"), it's a lot of work, but honestly, I wish I got feedback like this on all my stories. I think that there has been a vast improvement from the first draft (the one that only you saw) to this.

Off to bang keyboard,

-John

[Ugga Bugga]

thanks for the great attitude. So often creators get defensive about the feedback. I look at it as free advice, heling me to try to get better. Obviously you see it the same way.

[J. Alexopoulos]

Que the Whitesnake: "Here I go again..."

a few adjustments to pages 1,4,6.

PAGE ONE: (4 Panels)

Panel 1:
Wolverine is leaning against the wall of a sewer. He is hunched over, with his hands trying to keep his guts from spilling out of a large slash across his abdomen. His uniform (brown and tan) is shredded and dissolved in some places. Hair sticks out of holes in his mask, and he is cut and bleeding all over.
NOTE: Wolverine already has a hole in his uniform from where the Alien burst through his abdomen earlier.

CAP-W: (Wolverine)
Shit. Gotta buy some time for my healing factor to catch up. C’mon, you can do it--

Panel 2:
A bit of saliva has dripped onto Wolverine from above. Wolverine is looking up at the Alien (off-panel). One of Wolverine’s set of claws are out, held above him for protection. The other hand is still holding his guts. The abdominal wound is now smaller, and much of the intestines have been pulled back into the abdomen.

CAP-W:
Or not…

Panel 3: (Large Panel)
We can now see the Alien clinging to the ceiling above Wolverine. It is salivating and has its tongue teeth extended.

CAP-W:
Where the hell’s the Human Torch?

Panel 4:
Flashback: Logan (WOLVERINE) (dressed in a leather coat, blue jeans, flannel shirt and cowboy hat- costume hidden underneath) is in a bar, sitting at a table with Johnny Storm (HUMAN TORCH). Johnny is dressed stylishly.
On the table in front of them are their drinks; Logan has a bottle of whiskey (no glass), while Johnny Storm is on his second Martini. The bar looks pretty sleazy.

CAP:
4 Hours Earlier

LOGAN 1:
You smell something, Storm?

JOHNNY:
Are you sitting in a bar called “Hank’s Hole”, asking me if I smell something?


LOGAN 2:
Alright, I need to take a leak.

CAP-W:
Reed Richards asked for a favor. Typically I don't favors. . . but the man has saved the world enough times, that I probably owe him one.




PAGE TWO: (5 Panels)

Panel 1:
Logan is in the bathroom. He is just inside the entrance and is surveying the room.

CAP-W:
So now I’m spending my Friday night on a play date with the Human Charbroiler out there. Hunting some Xeno-whatever-- An alien.

Panel 2:
Close-up of Logan’s face. He is sniffing the air.

AFX:
SNIFF

CAP-W:
If anyone can track a lost space invader through the city, well that’s me. The nose knows.

AFX:
Kunk

Panel 3:
Logan is peering at a toilet. The tank’s lid on the back of the toilet has shifted slightly askew. Logan is reaching towards the lid with one hand, while the other hand’s claws have extended.

CAP-W:
And something smelled funny in Hank’s.

Panel 4:
The present: Wolverine is fighting the Alien. Wolverine has delivered a diving slash. The slash causes the Alien’s yellow acid-blood to fly, burning anything it touches (except the Alien).

CAP:
New York sewer system: Now.

AFX: (Alien)
SKREEEEEEEE

Panel 5:
The Alien has grabbed Wolverine and has buried its tongue-teeth into Wolverine’s throat, destroying it in a gory mess.

WOLVERINE:
ARRRRRG- hk--




PAGE THREE: (5 Panels)

Panel 1:
Wolverine has delivered a desperate uppercut, slicing off the biting end of the Alien’s tongue. While his throat is no longer being chewed out, he now has to deal with a face-full of acid.

CAP-W:
This thing is way too quick.

Panel 2:
Profile shot of Wolverine, his eyes nearly closed, trying to recover.

CAP-HT: (Human Torch)
“Earth to Wolverine… wake-y wake-y.”

Panel 3:
Flashback: Similar shot, except now it is Logan coming to in Johnny Storm’s sports car. His upper body will be soaked. He is slumped in Johnny’s passenger seat.

JOHNNY 1: (op)
About time. I had to drag your fat ass all the way into the car. You weigh a ton, man.

JOHNNY 2: (op)
Not to mention the upholstery damage from your little toilet bath.

LOGAN:
Not me, bub. It’s my adamantium skeleton. What happened?

Panel 4:
Johnny is pointing to the back seat.

JOHNNY:
I think you killed our little space alien…

Panel 5:
Shot of a dead Alien Face-Hugger in the back seat.

JOHNNY: (op)
You were passed out in the washroom, with this thing dead beside you.

WOLVERINE: (op)
I can’t remember-- kaf-




PAGE FOUR: (5 Panels)

Panel 1:
Logan is ripping open his shirt and jacket, revealing his brow/tan costume beneath. There may be a slight bulge beneath his ribs cage, below the costal arch. Bloody spit flies from his mouth.

WOLVERINE:
KAFF--HAK

CAP-W:
It’s like somethings cutting up my guts. From the inside.

Panel 2:
Logan’s back is arched in pain. BAM! The chest-burster has popped through Wolverine’s upper abdomen, glistening in blood and clear birth fluids. It is biting at the air in front of it, ready to kill at birth. shattered cartilage poke out of Wolverine’s chest (no bone because of his adamantium skeleton). Blood explodes towards the dashboard and window.

AFX
ARRRRRRGH

AFX:
Skreeeeeee

CAP:
Ya, pretty accurate description

JOHNNY:
HOLY--

Panel 3:
Ext shot of the car. The Chest-burster has broken through the passenger-side window, and is scuttling towards a sewer grate. Note the blood on Logan’s windows. The car is skidding to a halt.

AFX:
K-SHHH

AFX:
SKREEEEEEEECH

JOHNNY: (op)
What the hell is that? Logan?

Panel 4:
We are back inside the car. Logan is staring blankly at Johnny, eyes wide, dead. Blood is everywhere on his side of the car, dripping out of his mouth and the hole in his abdomen.

CAP-W::
I think that was my Alien baby.

Panel 5:
Present: Wolverine is still crouched down. He is looking at the Alien. He is hurt, but still determined to kill the monster.

CAP-W:
They grow up so fast, don’t they?





PAGE FIVE: (5 Panels)

Panel 1:
Wolverine and the Alien are circling one another, claws out, teeth bared. They look like two feral killers let loose.

WOLVERINE:
Daddy’s disappointed. Come get your punishment.

Panel 2:
The Alien swings its tail like an axe. Wolverine ducks below the razor-sharp tail as it whooshes overhead.

Panel 3:
Acid spit hits Wolverine in the face. His mask is already starting to dissolve as well the flesh beneath. Wolverine has his hands up, covering his burnt and blinded eyes. He has staggered backwards a step, surprised.

AFX: (acid)
TSSSssssss

WOLVERINE:
Argh

Panel 4:
Wolverine has been impaled and is being propelled backwards by the Alien’s razor sharp tail. Wolverine’s arms and legs are flexed forward as he is pushed back at a high rate of speed.

WOLVERINE:
hgk--

Panel 5:
The Alien is drooling over Wolverine’s unconscious form. Wolverine is bleeding from multiple wounds and his outfit is shredded. Wolverine’s claws have retracted into his forearms.





PAGE SIX: (5 Panels)

Panel 1:
Logan has come back to life. His has his head thrown back in anger howling in rage.

LOGAN:
RAAAAAAAAWR!

CAP-W:
Me, I’m always pissed after I die...

JOHNNY: (girly shriek)
AIIIIIEEEE!

CAP-W:
…Johnny, he just screams like a girl.

Panel 2:
Wolverine is out of the car, slicing through the sewer grating, ready to dive in. His shirt and jacket are discarded behind him.

JOHNNY:
Logan! Wait!

Panel 3:
Johnny is now the Human Torch. He has ignited and is flying to the sewer where Wolverine has entered. His trendy clothes are charring off of him in flakes. A trail of smoke and flames lead back to his car, parked crookedly in the middle of the street both doors wide open (Lambo doors?).

CAP-W:
I should have waited for Johnny, but that thing got my blood up.

Panel 4:
The Human Torch is hovering in the sewer, flames blazing to light up the area, he is searching for any trace of Wolverine. Logan’s jeans float in the water below him. It is useless.

HUMAN TORCH:
Damn!

CAP-W:
Pardon me if I don’t like being made into an ersatz maternity ward.

Panel 5:
Back to the present. The Alien is holding Wolverine up by his head, its teeth about to sink into Wolverine’s neck. Saliva is dripping.




PAGE SEVEN: (6 Panels)

Panel 1:
Wolverine has one eye open, looking at the Alien’s face.

WOLVERINE:
Hey bub…

Panel 2:
Flame has blasted into the Alien, knocking it away form Wolverine.

AFX:
FWOOOOSH

WOLVERINE:
…Flame on.

Panel 3:
The Alien’s tail (Not the razor tipped end) clumsily slams the Human Torch into the sewer water.

AFX:
TSSSSssssss

CAP-W:
Damn! Slow down so I can stab you.

Panel 4:
The Alien has turned back to Wolverine who is slumped on the ground where he was dropped. It is crouched ready to pounce

CAP-W:
I gotta let it think I’m finished… that ain’t hard.

Panel 5:
The Alien is leaping at Wolverine, leading with its deadly jaws, prepared to end this with a single bite.

CAP-W:
It can’t resist the killing blow.

Panel 6: (small inset)
Shot of one of Wolverines fists. His forearm is chorded with flexed muscles, as his claws shoot out.

AFX:
SNIKT

CAP-W:
Neither can I.



PAGE EIGHT: (3 Panels)

Panel 1: (Large Panel)
Wolverine is standing, his clawed fist shoved through the back of the Alien’s skull. The Alien’s momentum had helped drive Wolverine’s claw through its head. Wolverine has his head thrown back roaring in triumph. It is a primal scene. The Alien’s blood has splashed everywhere. Half of Wolverine’s face and body are yellow and burning with the acid. He looks like he’s been through hell.

WOLVERINE:
RAAAAAAAWR!

Panel 2:
Wolverine has slumped to a seated position on the ground. The Alien’s head still around his arm. More of his mask and uniform have been shredded and melted off. His upper body and face continue to burn from the acid

JOHNNY: (op)
Dude…

Panel 3:
Johnny Storm is no longer on fire, and is approaching Wolverine. Johnny is in his blue Fantastic Four uniform. The acid has dripped off of Wolverine, leaving scarred and blistered flesh beneath.

JOHNNY:
…you totally owe me a new car.

[Ugga Bugga]

CAP-W:
Reed Richards asked for a favor. Typically I don't favors. . . but the man has saved the world enough times, that I probably owe him one.

typically I don't do favors

[Ugga Bugga]

JOHNNY 1: (op)
About time. I had to drag your fat ass all the way into the car. You weigh a ton, man.

JOHNNY 2: (op)
Not to mention the upholstery damage from your little toilet bath.

LOGAN:
Not me, bub. It’s my adamantium skeleton. What happened?

this is unclear. logan seems to be responding to Johnny 1. Then Johnny 2 comes, and confuses the response.

[Ugga Bugga]

CAP-W:
Pardon me if I don’t like being made into an ersatz maternity ward.

This line has sort of bugged me each time I've read it.

He hasn't been turned into part of a hospital building. You are implying that he has been turned into a mother. However you've already made that point.

I think he's more pissed because he had to leave a bottle of whisky.

[Ugga Bugga]

This script seems to really be rounding into shape. It takes a village.

[J. Alexopoulos]

Ugh!
I edit it in the post, but not the hardcopy...

CAP-W:
Reed Richards asked for a favor. Typically I don't favors. . . but the man has saved the world enough times, that I probably owe him one.

typically I don't do favors

The other two are later revisions, I'll just switch em' back or work it out.