Lyfeforce, #1 pages 1-4 pencils

[gbearsf]

Hi all!

I'm new to the site and wanted to share my latest illustration project, "Lyfeforce". This is the first four pages

you can see the first page inked and colored at my personal website, www.geneguilmette.com

[gbearsf]

Hi all

I decided to post the inked and colored pages as well.

I'll add them as I complete them.

any comments are most welcome!

Thanks!

page one

[Repo Man]

These pages look really action packed. You have a real talent for conveying energy and action in your storytelling. If I could offer a crit, I'd say to work on your anatomy. The heads especially look somewhat flat and long.

Still, nice work and I look forward to seeing more of your work here at PencilJack.

[gbearsf]

Thanks Repo! I apprecate the crit!

I do realize the faces are not as shaded now, but once I color them I hope to give them more depth. I still think your right though and I'm working on my anatomy everyday.

cheers!

[cs3ink]

Your pencils are fun. Sorta Ditko meets Byrne.

Your storytelling is very strong.

The inks and colors, however, REALLY undermine the effectiveness of your efforts. Your inks have no depth, and your colors overpower the art.

Keep at it. You have a seriously great stort here.

[NickRocks]

Your inks have no depth, ..

I noticed this right away too. at first I thought you just colored over the pencils.

[rubbertrunk]

Wow, nice job. Even though it's very "filled", I find it clear and legible. I still think maybe a little empty space to let the eye "breathe" a bit might help, but I think this works nice. I like the style too, keep up the nice work. I do think the colors could use a bit of help though.