My first comic strip (moderate gore)

[Wicked_Limb]

I didnt know either to link this or post the image in here since it has some gore in it so I flipped a coin and linked it.

http://img168.imageshack.us/my.php?i...isode1thi2.png

I am open for discussion

[Norman B8s]

'This sort' of art is always so difficult to comment on: I don't mean to sound condescending, so I apologise in advance if I do, but it's not easy telling if the look of the art was intentional, or that your skills have not yet sufficiently evolved.
The storytelling feels a bit clunky: straight-on shots, save for the first and third panel (that 3rd panel is very nice, by the way); no sense of spatial relationship (really irksome, like an itch you can't quite reach, only mental); garish and in some cases gradient colours; a bit of odd writing (especially the caption box in panel 1); and that guy suddenly showing up in the last panel.

You do know how to set up a story though. I'm interested in what's going to happen next. And incorporating the A Perfect Circle logo brought a smile to my face. Just keep posting and you're bound to improve.

[Wicked_Limb]

Thank you for commenting and no I dont mind at all, it is my first comic and really just started drawing in 2D ( this is actually my 4th project drawing people ( the other 3 were drawing the characters trying to get a feel for them) thats why it took me so long to make this.

I am glad you liked my 3rd panel that one took me a little time but as for the 1st panel the narrorators block I wanted a small like twilight zone introduction.

As for the 3rd guy ( Daryl) jumping in there he is in the 3rd panel ( sorry if it doesnt look too much like him I tried to make a close composite but I wanted a cool shot )

The story well im a newbie at it I tried to make a nice introduction to the three and sorry about the cut throat plot ( the last frame killed me took me forever) but my next strip i will try to sharpen it up some.