Red Rider

[Acre]

Hey guys I could REALLY use some input on this one.
I want to make it as good as i possibly can.
I promise I'll change whatever you tell me to!
I'm on my knees here! *bursts into tears*

[DancingDoorGuy]

hard pressed to crit this puppy...

... two tiny things. one... the lines on the outer edge of your characters body could be a bit crisper/ darker/ bolder... it looks like they bleed just a tiny bit. The other the highlights on his costume seem a bit too soft (not the helmet... I mean the forearm and back).

This is me at my most anal. This work is great!

[Karim]

the light is in front of the grey graphic thing while the surf board is behind looks weird, you should put it behind as well imo

[Mase]

As Karim mentioned, putting the graphic behing the board would help alot. From a costume design perspective, I don't like the big helmet - it gives him a higher center of gravity. Also, he has a slim body but a rounded face.

I don't know anything about him, just my first impressions.

[Acre]

DDG: "...the lines on the outer edge of your characters body could be a bit crisper/ darker/ bolder..."
Check. I'll definitely make the outlines "crisper"
The other the highlights on his costume seem a bit too soft (not the helmet... I mean the forearm and back).
So when you say soft, should i make them harder-edged, or more intense? Or both?
Karim: the light is in front of the grey graphic thing while the surf board is behind looks weird, you should put it behind as well imo
Yeah, you're right. That's the way I had it at first but someone told me to do it the other way. I guess I should go with what i think looks good, eh?
Mase:From a costume design perspective, I don't like the big helmet - it gives him a higher center of gravity. Also, he has a slim body but a rounded face.
Okay this is the point where everyone calls me an idiot, but... This is supposed to be Little Red Riding[helmet] hence the wolf ...a prepubescent or underdeveloped, athletic girl. Since everyone sees it as male I've obviously failed. So what am i doing that makes it look like a guy, and how can i change it?

[DancingDoorGuy]

harder edged... maybe a bit more intense.. mmm, no. just harder edged.


oh, a girl you say. hmmm. Well, let me ask you this... is this something you did with a computer program? How much can you change here? Is this something that you'll have to touch up or is it something you can just wipe it away and start a new? Different strategies for different methods.

[penabled]

Nice work! To help out... highlights need to be both harder edged and more intense on the body.

A girl? Hmm...narrow the waist a bit more. Narrow the face a LOT more....that is partly the problem. I think that also the expression is partly to blame. Maybe look around at pics for a good model. Maybe let some hair show?

Also...I'm not sure what significance the accessories have, but it seems like clutter. It's not clear to me what the cables or rope or whatever, is supposed to be doing.

[hoosiermouse]

To be honest, the face is very mannish. The wrinkles on the brow and the nose really do it. I had a feeling this was supposed to be a woman, but didn't want to say anything in case I was wrong. The shadowed boobs kinda clued me in. If you fixed some of the issues with the face, it'll fix a lot of the confusion.

[razz007]

yep if this is a girl the first thing is defintely teh face needs some reworking. The face is too round, kinda squashed and bulgy. Try refining the face, simplify it make it narrower and a bit longer (not too long cause then it won't be proportioned to teh body). Maybe add a little womanly curves to the hips. Even malnurtioned girls have a more of a womanly build compared to guys.

[Beastie]

Before reading everyone else's comments I was going to say that this looked like a man with a woman's body.

I guess thats been established now though.

The features on the face are just SO manlike.
Heavy brow with sunken eyes, flat (broken?) nose, grumpy mouth and sagging jowls.

All of those features need to go.