Do these pages flow well or not? *not in sequential order*
I can't see big issues in storytelling...I mean I can understand the panel to panel flow there.
The improvement area i see is about the camera angle and variety of shots...and it's a topic very important for storytelling improvement.
the main camera shots used in your pages are close shots, I suggest you to explore other kind of shots (bird eye view, worm eye view, establish shot etc...)
Get one comic you like and try to see how your fave artist used them into the pages
ok the good news is page 170 is pretty good. nice establishing shot, and you convey a sense of desperation in the female arguing with the voice very well.
however, i dont like page 169 that much. the storytelling is fine, i can tell whats going on. but the page layout itself is having some serious issues.
the three panels going down dont really read like they should be in that order. am i reading down then over or over and down? thats very confusing.
also, the last panel should be closed, because the guys legs just kind of stop at the panel above him, when you are implying that its supposed to be behind the other ones.
good start though!
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Not too bad there...Move that Camera! remember Comics are about interesting pics that entertain our eyes.If your going with limited camera angles you'd better detail the heck out of things
Keep up the good work!
Blessings!
Bryan E.Warner
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