a page done for a test..what do you think about?
P1 Nice panel. I would have it flipped though. It would help with the flow. Have her looking to the right, thats where the reader is going. Details on the revolver need sharpening up.
P2-I really don't like the square gun she is holding in her right hand.
P3- The main character jumps in, firing to her side, but the last panel shows her target laying in front of her.
P4- I would like to see more of an effect on what shots are doing. At the moment, it's hard to tell if they are actually hitting.
That said, it looks pretty sound to me. Are these roughs or final images?
PS. Would she wear that skirt if she were going to go out and shoot werewolves?
I agree with what was said in the above comments and it's also a bit confusing with what she's jumping out from behind. Looks like a wall but it seems kind of blah. I would say to have at least one panel on this page set up where you pull the camera back a little bit to show where the action is taking place.
Mr hades i usually ink my stuff ,so somewere i prefer sharpeming up in the ink stage.
however tx both of you for the nice cc!
Well Dan has gave a pretty good review ( Mr Hades )
I'd say Panel 1 is your best panel on this page.( I'm thinking you started out strong but got a bit weary as the page continued ) I always stress Taking your time and no Rushing so you can be the best you can be.You have some perspective issues but at least your going for it
Right now Cleaning up your Panels or adding the Gutters would really make your page pop more.As it is it's all kinda muddy to me.( an that's probably just me ) your story telling not bad,but I did have to study panel 3 to see if we were jumping into something or Jumping out from behind something.( we are jumping out from behind yes? )
Panel 4 looked a bit questionable on what was happening to the Werewolf,your motion lines look out place,or those darker crooked lines.
The pose tells me Lets Dance Disco! instead of Impact.
Panel 5 is a good thought.But it looks off kilter to me,perhaps it's a perspective thing.
OK my Good Friend, these are just My Opinions.I hope you Take your Time and really blow us away here.Remember The more you do the better you'll become..The better you become,the more you will do.
thanks for the nice words Bryan
I like how you did the girls face, it's very appealing Keep it up, you'll iron out the kinks in time.
Killer Wolf -thanks so much for the kind words!
Rubber- thanks fot the tips
simon thanks..I usually make more attention on the faces girl