Sorry but this is a bad discussion, so I edited the topic...
Sorry but this is a bad discussion, so I edited the topic...
Last edited by rsoathman; 09-27-2006 at 09:18 PM.
Uh - what the hell is going on?
It looks like a random montage of porno shots.
Give us a little background on the story being told, otherwise I'm just going to assume it's spank material. :P
i agree it looks like erotic comics/porno and you obviously used centerfold spreads to draw, also you lack storytelling in the panels, the viewer has to know what's happening without reading it.
Also add value and tones to the bodies and faces, more details on the backgrounds.
i hope that helps, and I look forward to seeing more/better ones.
I thank all for the critics but I won't post here(in this topic) anymore.
Last edited by rsoathman; 09-27-2006 at 09:28 PM.
I thank all for the critics but I won't post here(in this topic) anymore.
Last edited by rsoathman; 09-27-2006 at 09:27 PM.
Okay, let's see what we got here:
Page 4
Panel 1 - She's lying in bed masturbating.
Panel 2 - Now we see her sleepwalking.
Panel 3 - Close up shot of her eyes open.
Panel 4 - She decides to lick her lips.
Panel 5 - She shrugs her shoulders.
Page 5
Panel 1 - Upward shot so that we can clearly see the statue that is a key element in what this story is about...although Wonder Woman is leaning so the statue and her must not be on the same ground plane...
Panel 2 - Wonder Woman puts on her top...while cupping her breasts (the fanboys will love that...keeps 'em coming back for more).
Panel 3 - She feels the need to touch her boot...I have no clue what that background is in that panel.
Panel 4 - She decides that she's sexier than you and it's time to...STRIKE A SEXY POSE! Yee Haw!
And there you have...yeash you guys are dumb if you couldn't figure out what was happening here...she's clearly trying her hardest to get ready and look sexy for when the pizza delivery boy shows up so that she can seduce him and not only take his virginity as she has done with many other pdb's...but also so that she can get free pizza and breadsticks!
Last edited by Juan2.0; 09-27-2006 at 07:14 AM.
I thank all for the critics but I won't post here(in this topic) anymore.
Last edited by rsoathman; 09-27-2006 at 09:28 PM.
You know no no, yes un do?Originally Posted by rsoathman
Yeah, I take issue with the depiction of Wonder Woman sleeping. I read a Wizard interview once which pretty much confirms she sleeps on her side and farts all night long.
Nothing sexy about that.
I thank all for the critics but I won't post here(in this topic) anymore.
Last edited by rsoathman; 09-27-2006 at 09:29 PM.
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