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[Bryan E.Warner]

hummm..
You Do have Drive.....I would still have to be with Sheldon,,I think for starters you should SLOW Down a bit..Think
Your linked pages are lacking as your previous.
your not bad but you could be a whole lot better..Lets eh

[dushans]

Yep, well this was done while back. I am going to do some new work from you guy’s advice and post them soon.

[Deth]

Im curious to see your work in pencils only. I think your inks have a thickness to them thatmake your work seem rushed.

This is much better than what I've seen before. Because although I see influences it all seems genuinely yours.

at times your storytelling gets confusing BUT it is clear for the most part.

You also have a good amount of drive for being able to complete that many pages.

Your backgrounds are minimal and the ones you do have seem a tad flat. try to work on perspectives a little more you'll see a world of difference in the final outcome.

I know I seemed like an ass before. Im really not. I actually think Im a nice enough guy. I also think you are a talented artist.

How long did you spend on each page may I ask?

I normally take around 7-10 hours on a page. Dont feel you got to rush on your pages. Take your time until you get the desired result.

This is my personal pref. but Id like to see something with a little less blood and gore. But thats just the father of two talking in me.

All in all I'd say keep it up. with a little bit of anatomy work, perspective work, and composition work, I can see you excelling quite well.

P.S. Clean up those lines.

[dushans]

Thanks Deth, its alright, just a miss understanding there.
any way i got some anatomy books and how to draw comic books.
i am going to study those. thanks aging for your advice.

[Deth]

Sorry to bother you. let me give you one last tip. when you look through those anatomy books. Dont focus on the muscles. focus on how the body moves. like how your chest and neck shift when you raise your arm and things like that. Its much more important than drawing nice muscles.

[dushans]

thanks aging, I will definitely keep that in mind.

[Dawnsknight]

well, mybiggest crit is anatomy. like me, you need to work on your anatomy.

[Buffalo Soldier]

fuqed up seriously... the art tells the story decently enough- I would love to see you go back and out more time into each panel. I know its hard thoug when you are trying to finish an entire plot line.