paolo's sketchdump.

**paolo_l7** · 12-20-2005, 03:51 AM

link:
http://www.deviantart.com/view/26629179/

I'm in a rush. Comments and Suggestions on this one please. Drawn directly in the PC using a tablet coz of lack of time. I'm 1/6 done and I need to finish this by friday morning, colored, printed, and framed. So if you can drop a helpful comment, please do. I'd really appreciate it.

Oh yeah please rate from 1-10.

**bbbearcounty** · 12-20-2005, 10:53 AM

Not bad. I like it.

**Killer_gym_sox** · 12-20-2005, 11:21 AM

reminds me of my fiance and i.. only if i were skinny.

on the serious side i really love this.. Very nicely done

**paolo_l7** · 12-20-2005, 04:09 PM

thanks.

though no crits? like proportion issues, etc? Coz while I can still improve on it, I will. While I have time, that is. I still got a day left.

So please, if you can give suggestions on how to further improve on it, please do.

**Killer_gym_sox** · 12-20-2005, 09:38 PM

kind of a tiny "sketch dump". Usually if you say its a sketch dump people will be expecting pages of sketches

**paolo_l7** · 12-20-2005, 11:16 PM

Oops. Sorry. I said sketch dump for two reasons. First, I'll be dumping my sketches here. Second, I was really going to put a couple of my sketches, however, I badly needed comments and suggestions on the drawing I posted above, so I decided not to post any other pictures yet so that the people will focus and comment on the pic I posted above.

I'll be posting my other sketches soon

**Norman B8s** · 12-21-2005, 03:09 AM

I like it a lot.
The only thing that bothers me is the length of the man's upper arm. It jumps out even more if you compare it to the woman's.
Her upper arm seems to be a tad too long too.

This is a minor nitpick but there is not enough space between the man's middle and index finger for the woman's middle finger to be able to slip through.

*edit*
I just took another look at your pic and I feel there's something off with the proportions; you've tried to portray the woman as shorter but you've only applied that to their upper bodies.
The feet-to-hip length is handled well but either the man's upper body is too long or the woman's upper body is too short.

**paolo_l7** · 12-21-2005, 04:10 AM

Yeah, I have this tendency to draw thin and long limbs. So I guess it kinda got stuck.

I wasn't able to read your comments immediately, so I continued drawing, doing a BG. I'll try to fix the proportions if I have the time. THanks for taking time to figure and point it out. Really appreciate it.

Anyway, Here's the pic so far.

note: please don't mind that little butterfly over there. I was just testing out something.

It's 75% done. If you add the corrections, I guess it'll be around 60%.

BTW, I'm planning to put rain in it. Do you think it's gonna be messy? And would it be too much if I put lots of ripples for the rain?

**Captain All That** · 12-22-2005, 04:59 AM

Dude, I consider myself a good artist (though I have yet to post a single pic on the site and I can honestly say I don't see much of anything I would change. Just make sure if you add the rain to show the ripples in the water... though i doubt you would forget with your attention to detail. I would like to see a reflection to to add to the water effect. As of right now I'm in awe and I bow to your awesomeness.

**bows**