does this count as sequential?...

[itchytasty]

if so great...
we've got a few comics on our site, and we see improvments especially from the first one, but we still need alot more improvments, so any ideas would be great, im especially proud of our latest [below]
crits always apreciated thanks




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[xadrian]

That flash on the crane didn't really jump out on the first...ten looks at the strip, so I had no idea why the girl was getting killed. As a stand alone, I still don't know why it would be necessary to kill her...but I haven't read back, maybe it's part of the story.

Maybe an sfx near the shot would clear that up.

[rubbertrunk]

I agree with the previous post, i didn't even see the crane, it just looks like she dies for no reason. I think the text is a bit confusing.

[AndOne]

seriously, I didn't even see that crane with the spark until it was pointed out, I couldn't figure out what was going on with her...the lettering needs work as well...check out fonts at www.blambot.com and there are plenty of fonts there that look much better, as well as pre made balloons (which isn't advisable to always use though)

on the other hand the actual cartooning is pretty nice...just work on clarity and lettering

[itchytasty]

yeah its a 2 parter so the previous comic set up this "shot"

Awesome feedback, this is what i needed, its hard to work on the comic and see things not pop out since the original resolution is 2723 X 3693 and everything sticks out at that size, i have to compensate for compression though, Thank you.

also thanks for the link to the fonts, i havent installedany since i got my new system, so im on my way to blambot

[AndOne]

no problem my man I know Blambot helped my lettering a lot

[itchytasty]

This is somthing we made for our christmas giveaway, we sent it off to get printed and it came back nicely, it looks alot better on poster paper than this small file, we signed it and sent it off to our [un]lucky winner.