Reply With QuoteNicely wrapped up and little gruesome. I don't know much about the H.P. Lovercraft world so I can't comment on theme.
What exactly was her mission, I read it quickly and I'm not sure I understand it right.
Thanks for the crits. Time to re-write.
Last edited by obnoxiad; 12-10-2005 at 05:42 PM.
Every morning there is a choice to be be made. Be groovy or not be groovy. I tend to choose groovy.
Nicely wrapped up and little gruesome. I don't know much about the H.P. Lovercraft world so I can't comment on theme.
What exactly was her mission, I read it quickly and I'm not sure I understand it right.
Hey Fox,
The actual mission was to retrieve the Tiara/crown that was worn on the head of the victim/woman. I could state that point, but I kind of like the idea of the reader getting a bit more of the twist at the end.
This story ties into a couple of different stories that I've got on the back burner right now. There is a second mission for the guy that hired her to locate the tiara. Then there is a story that details what those egg things actually are, and what that creature in the cavern was.
Lovecraft theme wise there isn't much here. I was going to do a much more broad DEEP ONE style piece (there Fish people that mate with humans), but I decided to not mention in the story (it's mentioned in the script) what the creatures actually are. That way I can work with an artist to allow him to really create his own vision. The artist working on this script has got some MEAN skills, and I can't wait to see his take on the piece.
I really appreciate you taking the time from your own scripting to read mine. I dug the newest HIP HOP DEATH thing. I thought it might be your best yet, but I noticed you had several crits so I kept quiet.
Be groovy all,
Shawn D. Hilton
Every morning there is a choice to be be made. Be groovy or not be groovy. I tend to choose groovy.
Ah don't keep quiet, the more crits the better.
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