untiteled comic

[alti]

just an idea of the far future on some other planet comic..



thoughts feedback critic all welcome.

[Virrodin]

hmmm, well the drawings are very cool as well as the colouring. i think you just need to develop it more. Second by just looking at the picture and ignoring the text i have no freakn clue whats going on. it looks like a bunch of random drawings with word boxes. so maybe if there where some sort of progression as to what is going on. however after readong it i liked it and understood it, but a more pronounced sequence of events would help you out a lot.

[alti]

abit more story on this page, as well as some ink.

[alti]

"however after readong it i liked it and understood it"

yeah alot of people are saying this after they have a read through, i wanted it to feel disjointed in a way,, graphically at least, everything you are seeing is supposed to be alien and weird, like from the kids perspective, he has just got to the planet. he is talking with a stranger in the middle of all these weird creatures in the middle of a strange city..

i also want people to be drawn to the text and want to keep reading, so they can make scence of all the art. its insentive atleast to keep reading.

[C William Russette]

Wow, this is quite striking. Disturbing as well. I don't know why. It just gives afeeling of erosion and entropy to me.

Looks fantastic.

[El Scorcho]

I like these images, but I'd like to see some sketches or something so that I'd kind of get an idea about your style.