Okay so here goes,
I see where your story is going but there are a few things that I noticed about your script:
You have to pay attention to the sentence structure! You have a lot of run on sentences going on through out your piece. ( Don't worry I have a habit of doing this too!, so dont feel bad!)
USE YOUR SPELL CHECK ON MICROSOFT WORD OR WORDPERFECT! ( I have a tendancy to do the same thing but I am working on it.)
I rewrote the first part of your script with some suggestions that I wrote into it. THEY ARE JUST SUGGESTIONS SO DONT FEEL INSULTED BY IT.
This is what history tells
About 20 years ago, people lived in relative peace, walking in the streets trying to earn some money in order to eat, and have a place to live, often they concentrated in other things just to forget the problems that surounded their lives, they knew of violence and fear all around the world, but little they knew of what was happening below their feet, what was in store for them.
just a few suggestions for this part of your script:
Our story began 20 years ago, when people lived in relatively peaceful manner. They worked on the streets to earn enough money to eat and for a decent place to sleep. While they rested safety in their homes, they were aware of the violence and fear
that was taking place all over the world. However little did they know of what was happening around them that would eventually have a great impact on their lives.
They were made aware of these events during something that they called weekend. This is the special day when people left their homes and journeyed with their families to something that they called a park. There they would participate in many activites with their family , such as one 8 year old boy who was playing with his sister in a wooden box filled with sand. While they were playing in the box of sand a bright flash of light could be seen out of the corner of his eye. As he looked up at to see what it was, he could see a bright glowing object that was so bright that it coud have been easily mistaken as a second sun. Excitedly the boy stood up and ran over to his parents about what he had just seen. However before he could ask them, a powerful rush of wind engulfed them and everthing around them in intense flames killing everything around them. Those that weren't killed by the flames were killed by the debris that was falling from the destruction of the buildings that were around them.
Only a few thousand humans survived this incident, trying to survive the best that they can.
Through the ruins of the decimated city, a boy runs though its ruins as the light of the nearby fires reflected off of the synthetic fabric of his body and on his forearms he wore large metal gauntlets. The explosions coming from behind him signify the fact that a soldier was giving chase to latest quary, the boy!
Following being the first soldier, other soldiers began to give chase to the boy. As they came close to the fires that were scattered throughout the ruins of the city, they could be seen wearing heavy armor and carrying assault rifles in their hands.
Then suddenly the man that was leading the chase gave the command to fire at the boy! The boy seeing that they were about to fire, turned and jumped towards his pursuers, much to their surprise. Holding his hands out in front of him, a blue light could be seen eminating from them, as a bubble of energy formed that was capable of deflecting the laser beams that were being aimed at him!
Soldier leading the attack: -Sir, the kid is repeling the attack –
Man on radio: -Call the artillery –
Soldier leading the attack: -Sir yes sir –
Moments later, three hi tech tanks could be seen bursting through the remains of some still standing walls and moving towards them.
a mechanical voice came out of the lead vehicle - awaiting further instructions commander–
-Attack – said the commander.
Immediately obeying their order , the lead tank shoot a powerfull laser beam to the kid, who was thrown to a wall. fortunately for him the force field protected him from any damage, but it faded away the moment the kid touched the ground. the cannon of the tank began to give off another bright glow as a second beam to preparing to fire again. However before the attack could take place a blue thunder came from the sky destroying the vehicle.
I see potential in this script, but you need to work on your description.
Would love to see this when it is finished!