Here comes the Thunder!

[Conan73]

This is a rewrite of a script that I have been working on that acts as a prologue for the rest of the comic that I am currently writing.
So let me know what you think about it!


Thunder

Page 1

Panel 1 ( top of page ) :

In the center of this panel a large circular building that is made up of pieces of solid white marble ( which has silver, light grey, and black swirls running through it’s surface). On the roof of this building an enormous circular opal crystal rests at the very center and shines as the bright sunlight hits it’s surface. Along the sides of the walkway are honeysuckle bushes, where humming birds can be seen flying around these bushes. On both sides of the building and the pathway are large green fields.

(NO DIALOGUE)

Caption: Olympus, once a place of relative peace and harmony for thousands of years.

Panel two (middle of page):

Around the building long marble columns could be seen rising up to the roof as rose vines rise up their surface and bloom in various colors ( red, white, peach, and yellow). A large set of oval iron doors could be seen in the front of the building, which leads to a stair way the leads to a white marble walkway that leads away from it.

(NO DIALOGUE)

Caption: and in a moment all of that changed in an instant.

Panel three ( bottom of page ):

Close up picture of the large oval shaped iron door that leads into the building

(NO DIALOGUE)

Caption: Thorough these doors a drama will unfold that will not only effect the life of one of these inhabitants but the lives of of everyone around the world.



Page 2

Panel One ( top of page)

A figure of a lone woman can be seen standing in the very center of the chamber which is dark except for a light that shines down in the middle of the room and right over her. Her face is heavily shadowed and the only things that are visible on her person is her long half black and half white robes, as well as her light brown hair.

(NO DIALOGUE)

Caption: This lone woman though an act of compassion for another being has committed an act that has been forbidden since the Great Accession took place thousands of years ago. Now she must now stand in front of her peers who will decide her fate.

Panel two ( bottom of page )

The lone figure stands in the middle of a large circular room, which has long opal crystal pillars that can be seen twisting up towards the ceiling. Where the light is reflected off of the shiny white marble floor, there can be seen various pictures of the constellations.

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Caption (small): This lone figure is none other than Themis the goddess of justice who looks boldly out at the very people who will decide her fate.

Page 3

Panel three ( Splash page )

She is now looking at her peers who are sitting at a half moon shaped table facing her. Their features are hidden by the shadows , as the light causes all of the focus to be on her. The light that is being shined on her becomes brighter which reveals some of her features. Her hair is tied back into a bun. She has a slim build and a long delicate face, which can be seen even though she wears a long flowing silk like half black and half white robes.

(NO DIALOGUE)

Caption (large and below the small caption ): The Exile.

Page 4

Panel one ( top of page )

The man who sits upon the throne wears a crown made out of white gold that has square pieces of ebony lining its center which arcs up until it forms a point at the middle of the crown. To the left of this man is an empty throne that is also made of ivory but has a back piece that is in the shape of a peacock.

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Panel Two ( middle of page )

The man has long light brown hair, thick light brown beard, and light brown eyes, as well as having a very muscular physique which shadows any of those that have gathered at the half moon shaped table in front of him. He wears a light grey inner robes and white outer robes that have silver leafing running along their edges. On his forearms he wears silver bracers that are made of white gold and holds a silver scepter that has an eagles head at its tip in his right hand.

(NO DIALOGUE)

Caption: The man that sits upon the throne is none other than the Greek god Zeus who must now preside over the council that will decide the fate of one of his children.

Panel three ( bottom of page)

Zeus has a very stern look upon his face as he begins to talk to Themis.

Zeus: Themis, you stand in front of this council accused of violating one of our most sacred of edicts. What have you to say about these allegations?

Page 5

Panel 1 ( top of page )

A man sitting on the far left hand side of the table. He has a crooked smile on his face as he looked over at Themis. He wears a black chest armor, black bracers on both of his forearms, and a silver band across his forehead. He has a handsome face, black beard, and long black hair.

Ares: I say for what she has done death is to good for her! Throw her into Tartarus and let the Titans deal with her!

Panel 2 ( middle left hand side of page )

Standing up from the ivory throne, that is situated to the right of Zeus, is a woman who is dressed in a white robe that is gold lining its edges. An golden headdress, that is shaped into the form of a pea cock with its feathers stretcher out wide, rests upon her chestnut colored long curly hair. She has beautiful slim face and a very slim build, as well as having blue green eyes.

Hera: How could you say something like that Ares? After all if it was not for Themis you might still be stuck in that jar that the Titan twins put you into when you tried to defend Mount Olympus from their attacks!


Panel 3 ( middle right hand side of page)

A woman who is sitting on the far right hand side of the table. She wears a dark green short dress and a dark brown leather tunic over it, while wearing a dark green string to tie her black hair back in a pony tail. On each of her forearms, she wears some dark brown leather bracers and on her right hand she wears a black glove. She has a natural beauty about her and an athletic build to her.

Artemis: (laughing at Ares) I remember that battle! Ares you were screaming for help for about two months before Themis heard you and helped to release you!

Page 6

Panel 1 ( top of page )

Glaring angrily at Artemis, Ares leans forward in this seat.

Ares: WE ARE SUPPOSE TO BE DECIDING THEMIS FATE AND NOT MAKING LITE OF SOMETHING THAT HAPPENED TO ME IN THE PAST!

Panel 2 ( middle of page)

Athena is still standing up and facing Themis.

Athena: WELL I SAY SINCE SHE CARES FOR THE MORTALS SO MUCH, WHY DON’T YOU TURN HER INTO ONE?


Panel 3 ( bottom left of page )

A mischievous look can be seen on Ares face, as he glances over at Themis from where he is sitting at the table.

Ares: NO ATHENA THAT’S NOT ENOUGH! STRIP HER OF ALL OF HER POWERS AND GIVE THEM TO THOSE AMONG US THAT ARE WORTHY OF THEM AND LET HER LIVE ON EARTH AS ONE OF THEM.


Panel 4 ( bottom right of page )

With a look of outrage on her face, Artemis looks over at Ares and points at him accusingly.

Artemis: YOU JUST WANT HER TO BE DEFENSELESS SO THAT YOU CAN TORMENT HER! OR MAYBE YOU JUST WANT TO GAIN MORE POWER FOR YOURSELF!

Page7


Panel 1 ( top of page )

Zeus: SILENCE! I HAVE HEARD ENOUGH OF THIS POINTLESS BICKERING! I WILL MAKE MY DECISION ON WHAT IT TO BECOME OF YOU NOW!

Panel 2 ( middle of the page )

Zeus: THEMIS, YOU WILL BE STRIPPED OF YOUR IMMORTALITY AS WELL AS ALL OF YOUR POWERS.

Panel 3 ( bottom of page )

Hera leans over and lays her arm on top of Zeus’ arm and places her hand

Hera: ZEUS, I THINK YOU HAVE BEEN TO HARD ON THEMIS, MAYBE YOU COULD GIVE HER A CHANCE TO MAKE AMENDS FOR WHAT SHE HAS DONE.

Page 8

Panel 1 ( top of the page )

Hera: WHAT IF SHE WERE TO FIND A MORTAL WHO WOULD AGREE TO ACT AS HER CHAMPION ON EARTH, SO THAT HE MIGHT OPPOSE THE ONE WHO CAUSED US SUCH A DISHONOR?


Panel 2 ( middle of the page )
Rubbing his chin and gently taking Hera’s hand into his own, Zeus looks over at Themis with a stern look on his face

Zeus: VERY WELL, I HAVE MADE MY DECISION. THEMIS YOU WILL BE STRIPPED OF YOUR IMMORTALITY.......

Panel 3 ( bottom of the page )

Gently Zeus pulls his arm away from Hera, as he begins to raise his scepter up into the air.

Zeus: HOWEVER YOU WILL KEEP ONLY ENOUGH POWER TO DEFEND YOURSELF. SHOULD YOU FIND A MORTAL WHO IS WORTH ENOUGH TO ACT AS YOUR CHAMPION ON EARTH......

Page 9

Panel 1 ( top of page )

Zeus points his scepter at Themis, as a strange silvery white glow starts to emanate from it.

Zeus: THEN ALL THAT I HAVE TAKEN WILL BE RESTORED TO YOU AND YOU ARE HEAR BY BANISHMENT FROM OLYMPUS WILL COME TO AN END! SO THEMIS PREPARE YOURSELF YOUR PUNISHMENT BEGINS NOW!

Panel 2 ( middle of the page)

Themis hold her head up with a look of determination on her face, as she bravely steps towards Zeus.

Themis: VERY WELL MIGHTY ZEUS, I AM READY.

Panel 3 ( bottom of the page )

Out of the tip of Zeus’ wand a silvery white light shone down and bathed Themis in its light, which causes her body to give off a white smoke light glow.

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Page 10

Panel 1 ( top of page )

While the Themis body continues to give off the white smoke like glow and rises up off of her body like steam. The pain that is felt by Themis can be seen in her face, but in her eyes Zeus can see her fierce determination, as her pride will not allow her to cry out in pain.

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Panel 2 ( middle of the page )

The light now no longer shines from Zeus’s scepter, as the pain that Themis feels finally forces her down on one knee. The other gods watch Themis in awe, as she struggles to stand herself back up onto her feet and the glowing white steam lifts up off of her body.

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Panel 3 ( bottom left of page )

The white steam swirls around above her head like the a whirlwind, as a bright shining white light can be seen coming form its center.

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Panel 4 ( bottom right of page )

Then a bright flash can be seen coming from the center of the whirlwind, and a rough outline of a round crystal can be seen at its center.

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Page 11

Panel 1 ( top left of page )

The clear crystal can be seen flying through the air as it makes its way towards Zeus.

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Panel 2 ( top right of page )

The crystal floats down into Zeus’ open hand, as Ares can be seen standing beside him with a smirk upon his face.

Ares: FATHER WHY DON’T YOU LET ME HOLD ONTO THAT FOR YOU...

Panel 3 ( middle of page )

Zeus: BACK AWAY FROM ME ARES, OR HER FATE SHALL QUICKLY BECOME YOURS AS WELL!




Page 12

Panel 1 ( top of page )

Zeus now faces Themis

Zeus: IT IS DONE, NOW LEAVE THIS PLACE THEMIS UNTIL YOU FIND YOUR CHAMPION.

Panel 2 ( middle of page )

Themis turns to leave the room when gets up and follows her out of the room.

(NO DIALOGUE)

Panel 3 ( bottom of page)

Ares catches up to her and turns to face her with a mischevious smirk on his face.

Ares: THEMIS, WHERE ARE YOU GOING TO FIND THIS CHAMPION? ON EARTH? HAVE YOU NOT SEEN WHAT IT IS LIKE DOWN THERE LATELY?

Panel 2 ( middle of page )

Watching Ares out of the corner of her eye, as a smile starts to form out of a corner of Themis’ face.

Themis: DO NOT WORRY, ARES , I WILL!

Panel 3 ( bottom of the page)

Ares was standing in the door way and watched, as Themis disappeared into a flash of bright white light!

Caption: Thus begins Themis journey for her champion and her only chance for redemption.

[psychoheat]

I guess this would be lika a full issue of the story? like a #0 or a
-1 or something like that.

I like the story you're telling, and the mytological references in it are very acurate and give more depht to what you're telling.

what is strange to me is the change from the first to the second page, is a really hard change, looks like a diferent scene is starting or a side story, when it should flow

also and not related to the plot of the story you repeated two page numbers #4 and #8

would like to see more of this story

[Conan73]

Thanks psychoheat

I really appreciated the assist!

I tried to have the reader see how peaceful and tranquil Olympus is before taking them into the council chamber where Themis' trial was to take place. Then to show the debate over what was to happen to her, which would cause utter chaos among the gods.

Thanks for reading this and have deleted the repeated pages 4 and 8. I guess I must have stuttered those pages up or something! I will post the next part of this script up in about a week so I will pm you when it is posted.

Let me know when you are going to post the rewrite of your script
It sounds intriging and would like to see more of it as well.

Well see ya around the forum and good luck to you!

[psychoheat]

cool i'll be waiting to see that, mine will tak some time, i have some work lined up, but i'll try to get it done for next week or so