Story Round 3

[banshee]

sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet

ooooh almost at the end... *jumps up and down*....


ben, you ok if I do the webpages for this (as I've been doing?)?

[Ben Christensen]

That's cool, Banshee. Why mess with tradition?

Photoangel (my wife, for those that didn't catch that) is working on her part now. She's got some interesting ideas, it should be pretty nifty.

The countdown has begun! 3 LEFT!

-Ben;onei;

[banshee]

http://www.penciljack.com/forum/show...threadid=45123

a discussion thread on the "Story round 4" idea

Just for your FYI (And ideally ur input too!)

Ok, Ben, b glad to do the pages

looking fwd to seeing PA's work!

YAY!!!! ALMOST DONE!

[PhotoAngel]

Here it is. Hope you like it.



Story Round 3
Part 13

By: Jamie Christensen

"These trees aren't much of a cover. I just need a small opening to try to get to my plane. If I can get to it I can get to Christmas Tree Island, then I'll be safe."

Jenny surveyed her surroundings, seeing only a few people walking around. Not knowing who she could trust and who was an enemy, she patiently waited for the chance to make her next move.

"Only one more minute, then I can make a run for it... wait for it... wait for it...GO!" Dashing forward, Jenny spotted her plane just ahead in a small clearing, right where she had left it when she first started this adventure. Now the only trick was getting there before she was spotted. With the plane in reach she looked around and discovered the coast was clear.

Climbing into the craft, Jenny pulled down her oversized goggles and flung her scarf around her neck. As she pushed the starter, the roar of the engine sent the people running. Having been spotted Jenny knew she had to act fast. Taking off, she headed left, hoping she'd be able to reach Christmas Tree Island before anyone could catch up to her. She didn't know who exactly was chasing her, but she thought she'd have a decent chance of not being caught. She was a good pilot and a fast thinker. Besides, she'd been in tougher scrapes before.

"OK, there are plenty of islands between here and Christmas Tree Island. If I zig zag between Vine Mountain and Firefly Falls, then head toward Leap Frog Hill, I should be able to lose them around Gnome Isle. Then I should be home free...well on my way to Christmas Tree Island... Yeah, that should work."

After figuring out her escape route, Jenny looked behind her to see just how close her pursuers were.

"They're a little closer than I thought they would be. hmmm, If I can just get to Vine Mountain... I wonder who’s back there?... Maybe Knowledge, possibly Johnny...Those two are always trying to catch me off guard! I can see the mountain now. It's one of my favorite islands. It's kind of small, but it's covered with trees which makes it easy to find great hiding spots. And since most of the trees have swinging vines you can get from one side of the island to the other in a hurry.

I just love seeing it from up here, it's sooooo green. Green is my favorite color, which is probably why I like this island so much, it's probably the most beautiful island I've ever seen. It's also really peaceful ... if you aren't running from anyone. There usually isn't anyone there, so that’s a plus. I love to just swing in the trees and think about the adventures that I've had and imagine all the adventures I'll have in the future...

I wish I could have stopped here but with those guys so close I'd never be able to... Oh well, I'll just have to try to concentrate on getting to Christmas Tree Island. Only three more islands to go and I'm well on my way to being home free!"

Suddenly remembering that she didn't know how close her pursuers were Jenny looked over her shoulder to find out where they were. "The scoundrels are catching up!...I wish there was a way that I could throw them off my trail a little bit more... Maybe after I get past Firefly Falls I'll be able to think of something, I'm almost there now anyway... I can see it. It's such a gorgeous place. There are these really pretty water falls all over down there. You can see them even from up here. There are a couple of them that I really love, they fill up this really cool little pond that I go to. There's this neat little stoney path that leads to the pond. It's pretty peaceful there, it's surrounded by all kinds of grass to hide in. It's great if you just want to be alone. I think the best part about it though is that there are all kinds of fish in there. When I'm there I tend to sit for hours and watch them. I like to put my hand in the water, and if I'm real still they'll swim by and I can touch them. Sometimes they nibble at my fingers thinking I have food for them. Maybe the next time I'm there I'll bring them a special treat.

The water is so clear there, you can see all the way to the bottom. It makes me wish I was a fish, how lucky they are to be able to swim all day. That would be a great life...no worries. I wish I was that lucky today. Then I wouldn't have to be running from anyone...ohhh, And they just keep getting closer! I wish I could lose 'em. Maybe once I get around Leap Frog Hill. That'll be coming up anytime now. I need to go faster, they’re getting too close! I wonder if I should try to land on the hill and then just when they get there take off again? It might throw them off a bit, the only problem is that it would slow me down, they'd just end up gaining on me. Hmmmm... what should I do?... I could really use a rest too... my arms are getting kind of tired... I think I'll just keep going though, It's not really all that much farther to Christmas Tree Island. And I can already see Leap Frog Hill.

You know, looking at it now it's kind of a cool little hill. It's all green and decently flat. You can start on it and then leap frog from place to place. Not quite as exciting as the other places, and not as many places to hide, but still useful in it’s own way. Sometimes, I like to play there, dance around, just have fun...

Ahhh, man...they keep getting closer! I just wish I could get ahead of them more...I can’t believe they’re getting so close. Before I know it they’ll be so close they’ll reach out and grab me... gotta go faster! Now I just need to get past Gnome Isle and then I should be fine... I’ll be bunches closer to Christmas Tree Island. WooHoo! I can see Gnome Isle! Yes! I’m getting really close to being safe. I’ve never been so happy to see this pointy little guy in all my life! Ohh, they’re still close... They keep getting closer! I think I can make it though, I just have to go around the gnome. Finally I’m headin’ toward Christmas Tree Island.... Man, they’re getting really close! They’ve almost caught me! I’m almost there though....getting ready to land... Almost safe!... Almost...”

“Tag! You’re it Jenny!” A voice cried out.

“Aahhh, man! I was almost to the tree, Johnny!” Jenny said. “Watch out Billy! I’m gonna getcha! You too Anna! No fair hiding behind the water fall, Jimmy! Be careful you don’t scare the fish away!”

Jenny yells as she takes off running, arms spread wide, and scarf flapping in the wind. “If I take off to the left, toward the gnome I should be able to catch Suzie off guard or maybe Tammy. She won’t be looking. If that doesn’t work I’ll head toward the tire swing, Johnny will probably be hiding there. I think I need to catch him once in a while.”

“I’m coming everyone, you better watch out!” Jenny yells out.

Deciding not to wait and see if she catches Johnny she enters the infinite to see what the next adventure is...

“...Before I knew it I was fighting off all of these creatures, they were unlike any creature you have ever seen before.” Jenny pauses to take a drink. “There must have been... at least a hundred of them, maybe even two hundred... I was all alone and not sure what my next move should be. Should I keep fighting? Should I try to make a run for it? Should I shift? What would be the wisest move? I just wasn’t sure... So, I decided to leave it up to fate. I moved the stick on the controller and he ate the circle as well as all the ghosts AND the cherries. It was-”

“Ahhhh, grandma! We want a real story! Not one about some game we’ve never seen before!”

“Yeah, why don’t you tell use about the time you had to fight off a whole bunch of werewolves, or the time Johnny Nowhere tried to kill you, or the time when... well, anything! We just want a REAL story!”

End of part 13

[banshee]

SWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEET

nice job PA me like!!!!

Anyone else?

[Ben Christensen]

Well, my opinion may be... a little jaded, but I think she did a really nice job on this for someone that isn't really a writer.

Ian, you're up. Show us what you've got.

-Ben;onei;

[PlasticPsyche]

good stuff

[Ian Miller]

Cool story, PA. I'll have the next part ASAP.

[Pikachu]

She did an excellent job. She captured a childs voice very well for the feel of her story. In fact, of everyone who's written so far, she's had the most clear and distinct voice as a writer. She dosn't write? Not even a journal, because it sounds to me like PA knows her stuff! Good work!

Now, I am anxious to start my piece, but being last I have to wait until everyone has written something so I don't jump the gun and write something that doesn't work. So far so good folks!

Pika!

[Ben Christensen]

What's the good word on this Ian?

I don't think I'm alone in my anticipation of your part, since this is one you've wanted so badly.

Hope to see it soon.

-Ben;onei;