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This guy throws his sword more than any real samurai would but hey, he's in the old west! Actually like that quality about this samurai guy. These top the pg.4 IMO.
A small crit would be that that bandito's arm stump wound looks way too clean and look it's even stopped blleding and is BONE DRY! Are you trying to tell me that not a drop of that blood guyser got on his clothes?
Keep up the good work!
ORGY TWINS!!
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Panel one has the really cool idea of the unfurling swords...But you could have used a more dramatic angle for this reveal shot...
Panel Two...Everthing is drawn realistically except for this guys wound...I would make his chopped shoulder more realistic...If you want to avoid graphic gore than add some threaded shreds from his shirt to cover the stump....
Also the sword looks too close the the horse's @sshole...it's disgusting and dosn't match up with you're previous page...to add some energy, you could also show the horse KICKING in in as it flais on the ground.
Panel Three: SUPER-long gun barrel......
As far as thowing the sword it would be unorthodox...but not unheard of.....In Lone Wolf and Cub Ogami Ito would ofthen throw his weapon....but then again he abandoned bushido for the path of meifumado....Also the ronin Musahsi Miyamoto was know to throw his sword...So you could of course use it in your story.....
Also you realize that your samurai is left handed? Regardless, I believe that samurai wear their sword on the left hip.
I like the second page and the angle of panel one.....You go go the extra mile and show the guys right hand clutching toward his neck instaed of hidden behind his body....oh yeah...duh!...he doesn't have a right hand...OK how about a trail of blood?
I like the whole project you did....I think the biggest place to improve is to vary the angles of your shots more....There are ALOT of panels on your pages that are straight on shots....Better angles would add more energy and drama....
Great!
CW
Last edited by CWmax; 10-30-2003 at 07:11 PM.
LOL!!!!!Originally posted by Johnny Blaque
A small crit would be that that bandito's arm stump wound looks way too clean and look it's even stopped blleding and is BONE DRY! Are you trying to tell me that not a drop of that blood guyser got on his clothes?
Sigh...reminds me of my prom.
Loston
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