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  1. 06-03-2003, 06:34 AM #1
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    ENTER the MYSTERY CASTLE- NEW PAGE

    Continuing the journey into the Mystery Castle......Here are the seqs. so far...Sorry about the light scans

    The third page is new...

    UPDATE 6-13-03

    NEW PAGE AVAILABLE......SEE NEW THREAD for all MYSTERY CASTLE PAGES.......cw

    Let me know what you think....

    Thanks,
    CW
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  2. 06-03-2003, 12:59 PM #2
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    great BG!

    i don't know if you used an actual temple to base that on or just made it up, but it is beautiful!

    my only crit is a personal preference:

    no pin up pages!

    i don't know, it just seems like cheating...
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  3. 06-03-2003, 01:13 PM #3
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    Re: great BG!

    Originally posted by rottenart


    my only crit is a personal preference:

    no pin up pages!

    i don't know, it just seems like cheating...

    awwwwww...c'mon...Can't I have a splash page in my comic?


    hehehe---Thanks for taking the time to comment!

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  4. 06-03-2003, 01:52 PM #4
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    Good solid work, but it's got some storytelling flaws.

    Page 1. I'm not sure what he's freaking out about. Has he been smoking something? He looks paranoid. Also, I think you've got 6 panels that could have been condensed to 3.

    Page 2. Great shot. Nice splash. Better detail than I could ever plan to draw. But why is he looking behind him still? Shouldn't he be looking at the temple? It almost looks like he has eyes in the back of his head. A lovely awesome shot, but I think he should be facing towards the temple. If he's looking behind him, at least his body should be facing the temple.

    Page 3. FLOW PROBLEMS. I really like the first three panels. Really nice transitions, especially from page 2. But after panel 3, I don't know wheather to read the panel directly below it, or the panel to the left of that? Also, I like the sequence of him seeing the window, but the panels on the right, the medium shot and closeup, there's not much going on.

    I'm sure there's some dialogue or a script you are working with, and that would be great if you could provide the link or post it here as well. It would be very helpful in critiquing.
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  5. 06-12-2003, 12:51 AM #5
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    Originally posted by EddieChingLives
    Good solid work, but it's got some storytelling flaws.

    Page 3. FLOW PROBLEMS. I really like the first three panels. Really nice transitions, especially from page 2. But after panel 3, I don't know wheather to read the panel directly below it, or the panel to the left of that? Also, I like the sequence of him seeing the window, but the panels on the right, the medium shot and closeup, there's not much going on.
    Pretty much what he said. I don't get the whole thing with the windows... as there's obviously a shit load of windows to be had. On the whole you're story telling's pretty damned good.
    Damn this chicks hot.
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  6. 06-12-2003, 08:08 AM #6
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    Originally posted by astrocity20
    Pretty much what he said. I don't get the whole thing with the windows... as there's obviously a shit load of windows to be had. On the whole you're story telling's pretty damned good.
    Thanks for taking the time to comment guys....

    What's up with the windows?......well I wanted the guy to be a little leery of entering the castle......He's going down the gated path trap that would herd an army that was trying to break into the castle onto this narrow path.....Where they would be trapped by archers in the gaurd house building....So the guy is kinda worried that he might be shot at from the windows.....but apparently there is no one there.....

    I know it's not blatent and most people who look at these won't realize these details....but I am having fun designing the castles defenses and architecture for this guy to walk around in....as long as you get a sense thet he's wary and paranoid...that's cool.

    Thanks again,

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  7. 06-12-2003, 10:22 PM #7
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    CW,

    When I get back from Heroes Con on Monday, I'll try to offer up some comments on your pages. Been meaning to for days.

    Take it easy,

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