well if you want to ask for critiques becuase you're going to submit to an editor then you need to have some more pages to we can really examine it on its storytelling because i'm sure that's going to be a big part in the way the editor looks at your work.
imagine us to be the editors... you're not going to just give us one page as an example of your cartooning... because it doesnt say anything. it's like showing a couple frames of a movie or 15 seconds of a song.
right now all i see is just transformers standing around... nothing there yet to make out any storytelling. but if you want critiques on the art... then i think it looks cool for transformers.
that first panel seems to making a tangent witht he border of the larger panel... that might be an annoyance to the editor. i dunno.
so for now all i can say is... more pages please.