Okay let me see if I can help....
as far as artwise a lot of this stuff is really nice
however this is storytelling and sequential art, and that is where you are suffering
On page one the page is over-weighed on the right side with all the activity-
on panel one, panel three, and panel five they are all tied together through one way making it like a big column weighing down the right side of the page, which is distracting for the left side.
Page two you are really not familiar where all the stuff is happening, since there is nothing that continues from one panel to the next
Page three is the strongest, with varying camera angles and a nice layout
Overall I think this stuff totally needs to be rethought out and redone
I don't mean to be anal, but these pages will NOT get you into Marvel