Green Lantern WIP-Critique, PLEASE!

[yomark]

Captain Broken Record reporting for duty!

"Static and stiff" you say? Hie thee to Costco and procureth thyself a big box of TWIST™. Walk Like an Egyptian is a great song and an hysterical SNL skit but, as you can see, falls flat in the funnies. Opposite limbs forward. If the the chest faces north/south, the hips face east/west. (ignore the Wolverine stuff, this was originally for another post)

C'mon Baby, let's do the Twist!

Okay, I'll admit that's more dynamic, but it's almost as if you're saying that torso and hips facing the same direction can't happen in life, and I just stood up and assumed my pose, without falling over…………so there!

……j/k. Thanks for the notes. I will keep them in mind, but I don't think I'll apply that to this drawing.

[yomark]

While different Lanterns wear the ring on different hands, from what I can remember, it is usually always on the middle finger. Unless they don't have hands or fingers, and then it's just wrapped around a tail or a animal paw.

Good enough. Before I read this, I'd seen a reference of Hal Jordan, and noted that was the case. You'll see in my second drawing that I've corrected that.

[yomark]

Great crit. I would also add that you are drawing the face without skin as well. You definitely have the talent to fix the problem.

I insist that there IS skin………there's no hair or brows………

But are you saying to knock back the "insertions" like on the body?

[yomark]

Okay. After all that, here's another try. Done as a simple warm-up excercise, while trying to correct some of the issues pointed out from the FIRST round of comments (and keeping in mind I drew this BEFORE the SECOND round). I think it might be a little better than the first. Do you?

[Carl_Shinyama]

I edited your comments for brevity, no disdain intended.

Holy MOLY! In my defense, I DID say "within my limitations", and a bit of what you said is WAY over my head and my anatomical knowledge at this point. I WAS intending to pose in the mirror for the right arm, as I knew it looked wrong. (I even did so earlier today, and saw that I was WAY off). Just as a note, I'm still pretty weak in my understanding of the brachialis and coracobrachialis, even to the point of not being sure generally where they fit in or of their structure. I've almost NO knowledge of the skeleton, which apparently shows.

All that being said, I will TRY to make good use of your notes, but may certainly fall short. I really DO appreciate the time and effort you put in for such a thorough analysis. It's possible I'm enacting again what Popninja says is my "trying to fly before I can walk".

Hehe, you're right. Sorry. Perhaps I got ahead of myself a little too much.

If you have trouble with learning the anatomy of the body, there is a book that I recommend: Strength Training Anatomy by Frederic Delavier. I learned much of the body's anatomy when I worked as a personal trainer, so as a result, I had a pretty good foundation when I became serious about learning how to draw.

I highly recommend it.

[dxdragon]

edited for me being a dick!

[Beastie]

to be blunt...the basic anatomy sucks....big time...and it's everywhere.

Not helpful AT ALL.

I don't mean to be rude.

You probably should have used different words then. Words that weren't mindlessly offensive and destructive might have been preferable.

[CopperPop]

To answer you question, yes it is better. However, the previous crits still apply.... the area under the right arm does not look right. Keep at it, its coming along.

[sirandal]

I would like to see his thrust out fist to look stronger...it looks like he is half making a fist.

[yomark]

to be blunt...the basic anatomy sucks....I don't mean to be harsh...but it is what it is.

It's not that I disagree with you, but truth: how and what you say is discouraging. But: "it is what it is".
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Not helpful AT ALL.



You probably should have used different words then. Words that weren't mindlessly offensive and destructive might have been preferable.

Thanks, Beastie. I don't want to dog-pile on top of dxdragon's back or anything, but I have to say I'm almost NEVER discouraged by your critiques, and consider you one of my MOST supportive buds here on PJ!
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To answer you question, yes it is better. However, the previous crits still apply.... the area under the right arm does not look right. Keep at it, its coming along.

Thanks. Now I find THAT encouraging. As I mentioned above, I'm intending to pose myself in front of the mirror and seriously study that arm position, and try to keep all the comments in mind from the second round when I draw this again.
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I would like to see his thrust out fist to look stronger...it looks like he is half making a fist.

Yes, that IS a trouble spot that I've noticed from the start. I was planning, after I felt I had the right arm nailed down, to concentrate on the fist until it has that tension you'd like to see.



Thanks all for the look and crits, I hope I can pull off a finished peice worthy of it.