Green Lantern WIP-Critique, PLEASE!

[yomark]

After a month and a half, having had to put my drawing mostly aside to help with my parents' health problems, I finally feel like I've got my chops back (such as they are). I'd really like to finish this piece, but NOW is the time to make corrections if I'm going to. So, please: help me. Critique the drawing and show me where I can correct it within my own limitations. (I'd really appreciate it)

[RMurray]

Ring is on the wrong finger

[Beastie]

You're still putting that extra piece of body in underneath his crotch, dude. No matter how many times you draw it on your characters - it will never exist as a real piece of anatomy.

[yomark]

Ring is on the wrong finger

Serial?

It should be the next one to the viewer's right? (I didn't know there WAS a correct finger). That's the finger I wear MY ring on.

[yomark]

You're still putting that extra piece of body in underneath his crotch, dude. No matter how many times you draw it on your characters - it will never exist as a real piece of anatomy.

Thanks, Beastie… noted, and I WILL correct, and thanks for the references that prove your point!

And I'm not being dense, I had thought I'd corrected that habit. It's just my lack in anatomy knowledge, and not using references.

Bad Mark!

[Beastie]

not using references.

Bad Mark!

Yes. You are a very bad Mark. Get those references out and make use of them!

[yomark]

Yes. You are a very bad Mark. Get those references out and make use of them!

Yes, sir. Will do so, sir.

Back in the day, I never liked to use clipart, either. Somehow, it feels like the same bone in my head is causing the "don't use references" compulsion.

What can I say? I'm sick. I need help.

[pell]

Actually, it doesn't look like you have extra anatomy at the crotch. It's just that your large abs muscle stretches down to where the crotch should be, so when you add the crotch underneath, it looks off. Otherwise, it looks like you have a fairly solid understanding of the parts of the body.

[yomark]

Actually, it doesn't look like you have extra anatomy at the crotch. It's just that your large abs muscle stretches down to where the crotch should be, so when you add the crotch underneath, it looks off. Otherwise, it looks like you have a fairly solid understanding of the parts of the body.

Thanks. Actually, combining both yours and Beastie's comments………


AND USING REFERENCES, B,……

……will probably do the trick. Thanks for the observation.

[Carl_Shinyama]

The mistakes I noticed:

- Head is too short.

- Right trapezius muscle is not contracted properly. It should be undergoing a concentric contraction (shortened). The way you have it drawn, it appears to still be in a decompressed form. Stand in front of a mirror, and watch what happens to your trapezius when you raise your arm like the figure is doing in your illustration. You'll see what I mean.

- Midsection is not long enough for that pose. If your intention was to give him a foreshortened midsection, as if he were flying, then foreshorten the legs accordingly. But if he's standing up, then proportion the midsection properly to display the illusion that he is standing up.

- Hips are too long. Shorten it so that it is just slightly less than the same length as the head. I agree with Beastie, it appears you've given the crotch an extra bit of anatomy that doesn't exist on the human body. Eliminate that, and I think the piece will appear much stronger in terms of proportion. (On a bit of a side note, when I draw, I always draw the ass cheek the same length as the head, and because of this, I am able to draw the length of the head properly.)

- The width of the the thighs are not equal to one another. The left thigh appears to be in perfect proportion, so thin the right leg so that it matches the left leg.

- Neck is too thin for a man with that kind of muscularity. Thicken it out to the point where if you looked at him straight up, that it lines up just inside his jaw.

- The left knee is too thin. It is almost the same width as the left wrist. Make it a little wider.

- Aspects of the abdomen are too small and not flexioned properly.

- The right pectoral muscles at the top should overlap the clavicle, hiding it from view. Raise your arm in the mirror just like the pose in the illustration, and watch the top of your pec muscle obscure your clavicle from view.

- The elbow joint is completely missing from the right arm. Because of this, you have the triceps inserted along the length of the ulna bone. That's too far down because in reality, the triceps is inserted on the olecranon process of the the ulna (bony protrusion on the back of the elbow).

- The right biceps is overlapping the extensor muscles of the forearm, which gives it the appearance that the biceps is inserted on the outside part of the radius bone. That's not anatomically correct. The extensor muscles are supposed to overlap the biceps while the biceps are supposed to be inserted on medial (middle) side of the radius bone.

- The Coracobrachialis muscle on the right arm is missing, making the arm appear awkward when it meets the arm pit.