Reply With QuoteSweet This has tight pencils, But the face in the last panel of the first page looks weird because The mans mouth seems to be too low.
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Sweet This has tight pencils, But the face in the last panel of the first page looks weird because The mans mouth seems to be too low.
Digging that pencil rendering, as always.
I think you could have pushed/handled the body a tad better in that splash on page 2. His torso is coming across as too thick and stiff.. while I think possible an extremely arched back might give the tortured feel you're looking for (?)
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Hmmm...I can see your anime influence coming out in your faces. Especially the closeup face in 1st page and the tortured face of 2nd page.
Caanan,
Specifically in the first panel on page 1 - way off in the background, you've got the wooden paneling on the wall equally rendered to the wood panels closes to us in that room. Squinting at it, the tone reads as black, so for the ease of reading (and penciling for that matter) I would suggest just making the far back wall pure black and maybe some of the ceiling in the back as well. The tightness of your pencils is admirable and compared to my own work is staggering. So simplify a little bit and well done.
Brian
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