You're right there is a few things off with this page, have you inked these already?
I like the idea and the execution, the ink and lines are friggin spot on! Solid effort with the building placement as well. A highschool girl running around stealing a wad of cash with badass guns but I can't help but feel there's something very odd about the way the scene is laid out.
Why is she jumping off the building (just how high is she?) to unload on a car, not really hitting anybody and then magically landing on her arm on the hood of the car into a side flip. She must be a superheroine with crazy strength to pull that off and a magician for going going feet first but somehow lands on her arm at the very end.
Apart from that tho, there's some very deeply flawed anatomy/perspective going on I really think you should look into that. The buildings are great but I really don't like those long bridges in between buildings, they don't look practical at all.
Keep it up Neon Neuron