How's My Inking

[Neon Neuron]

I was inking this page, but I feel like something seems off.
Any comment would be much appreciated.
On the blue lines only. I didn't do the pencils, they are only there for reference.

[Senji]

You're right there is a few things off with this page, have you inked these already?

I like the idea and the execution, the ink and lines are friggin spot on! Solid effort with the building placement as well. A highschool girl running around stealing a wad of cash with badass guns but I can't help but feel there's something very odd about the way the scene is laid out.

Why is she jumping off the building (just how high is she?) to unload on a car, not really hitting anybody and then magically landing on her arm on the hood of the car into a side flip. She must be a superheroine with crazy strength to pull that off and a magician for going going feet first but somehow lands on her arm at the very end.

Apart from that tho, there's some very deeply flawed anatomy/perspective going on I really think you should look into that. The buildings are great but I really don't like those long bridges in between buildings, they don't look practical at all.

Keep it up Neon Neuron

[Neon Neuron]

Thanks!
I usually draw and ink with a brush-type preset as you can see here:

http://www.penciljack.com/forum/show...15976-Tinn-WIP

But, this was done with vectors. It was my first time trying this and I wanted to see what others thought. I feared it might make the lines look stiff and dead.

This is a thing a friend and I were doing.
It''s a sci-fi comic based in the distant future. The school girl is a robot, which should explain the acrobatics.

Thanks for taking the time to comment.

[sirandal]

Yeah I think stiff is the only thing that I could come up with but it didn't look "wrong" per se (and manga stuff often looks stiff to me anyway).

Why blue ink?

[Neon Neuron]

Blue ink helps me see it better over the pencils. Higher contrast. When I'm finished, I change it to black.