Sample pages for a fantasy comic-advice and crits appreciated

[Ddesosa]

I'm an Illustration student living in London. I've been working on this story, Erzsebet, for awhile.

It is set in a fantasy world of 3 kingdoms, Gan Eden in the Sky, earth in the middle, and Shoal below the earth. The main characters are two minor demon noobs named Erzsebet and Chaiya, basically they try to perform a spell to summon the beast of Apocalypse, but get the spell badly wrong and summon the beast of Utopia and world peace instead. In a way it is typical heaven vs hell earth in the middle story, but I'm jewish and trying to use a bunch of jewish mysticism and iconography in order to seperate it a little from the rest. The coloring is also based on alot of jewish artists I love, and Edvard Munch and Klimpt who I think are the greatest colorists I know.


My plan is to do a small self published print run, mail it away to a bunch of indie or smaller companies other than DC and marvel, try to get paid work, and sell the rest at cons or anyway I can. Even if no publisher writes back, hopefully my sequential story telling will improve the more pages I do and I'll keep doing Erzsebet stories until I get good enough to get paid work. Also I'll hopefully learn how to sell my work and push my work by attending these cons. Well here is some sample pages

if anyone wants to take a look. Thank you very much, crits and advice are appreciated!

[Senji]

Woooo a fellow Londoner! Very interesting pages mate, I'm loveing the dialogue and the vivid visuals man they're pretty captivating.The style is not my kind of tea but can't help but feel intrigued. I'll defo check out the comic online when I get the time.

Keep it up man. The whimsical characters you have in these panels are jokes.

[lhaines01]

Very Colourful!!

[Ddesosa]

let me know what you think, of the fonts, and also does this create a sense of intrigue and make you want to read the rest?

[Senji]

Sooo when does this book come out?

I think the font and writing is just fine. It does make me want to read more so I guess you've succeeded but I think its because of the Jewish lore/story - it sounds very fascinating. The art style compliments the comic very well so kudos sir.

[EiceBleu]

Woooo! Trippy! Different. I like. I wouldn't mind getting my hands on this.

Though, I think those visible pencil lines might get to me after a while--I always hate them in my own watercolor work. Anyway, tiny thing.

[Apollo]

Nice colours.

[Ddesosa]

Sooo when does this book come out?

I think the font and writing is just fine. It does make me want to read more so I guess you've succeeded but I think its because of the Jewish lore/story - it sounds very fascinating. The art style compliments the comic very well so kudos sir.

Cool! Thanks for the kind words. First boutique print run coming out in a few weeks, going to be on sale at the london alternative press fair!

[lhaines01]

The color seems to give the story a dream like effect! Very cool!!

[Ddesosa]

Thanks, I think my colors are my strength, I am able to say exactly what I want to say with color, I just need to work on improving my drawing and story telling, but I'm working hard at it.

2 new pages I did for the next issue:




These were hard to draw emotionally but I put abit into them so hope it came out.




The first print run freshly delivered

36 full color pages, A4 size
Available in Orbital Comics and Mega City Comics in London, and available digitally on the ibookstore, kindle store and graphicly.com

Thanks!