Some pages..

[ArminOzdic]

Hi,

My name is Armin Ozdic and I'm new here.
Here are some pages I did reacently.some of them are published and some for private clients.
Let me know what you think.

[caanan02]

I love what you have going on here with the softer lines in spots - very subtle touch to everything-yet still keeping a solid structure with the characters by using heavy blacks. Def off to a good start

[ArminOzdic]

thanks man!I appreciate that!

[Joe Kerh]

I can see this reading well when complete.

The first page as two things that bother me. First, the woman in the chair seems to have to rotate herself after the first panel. Took me a second to figure out why the background had changed. Second, the girl while being viewed from above seems to change perspective suddenly giving her a two dimensional midriff. Her perspective also changes from her first panel to her second while the couch's does not.

I noticed the eyes in the second and fourth pages.

Either the panels are too far out of context without the story for it to make sense, or the doctors don't know what to look at.


This panel has the same problem. In a situation like this they would either be making eye contact or looking at their hands to avoid dropping the money and touching awkwardly. Its good to keep in mind how people really behave in everyday places to avoid drawing too many unnatural positions and movements.

[ArminOzdic]

Thanks for critique!

Regarding the first page I'll have to disagree with you,becouse I was given by writer the specific reference(movie screenshots)to use...she didn't rotate..its just diferent angle...

And regarding eye contact you're definitely right!

[andrewsteers]

Good attention to detail on interesting background elements.

As for using reference for the first scene, you have to make sure you use reference well and that a reader doesn't get lost in your story. It is also probably had to do with the writer that you are working with. I would have liked to see a wider shot in that first scene to establish the physical relationships of the character to the room and to each other.

I think you might be drawing you eyes a bit too large in most cases. Study up on skull anatomy and proportions of the head, that will always help.

The extreme up angle too on the last page might be a little abrupt, can't quite tell why you are using such an extreme angle.

[ArminOzdic]

Thanks,regarding that first page...I was given a specific references by the writer and scecific panel sizes and placement on page.I kept that to the script...You're right thou

I think,it is not a mistake to draw large eyes on girls,I like my girls to have large eyes

And that,I'm not sure...sometimes,page seem boring to me then I do that kind of angles or I brake of the panel borders or something like that...

Thanks for critiqe man,much appreciated.

[Ace Corona]

I like the photorealism of your style, you're a talented artist!

[ArminOzdic]

Thanks man!Much appreciated!

[Flegler]

Definitely a very cool style!

Though, there is something about page 1, mainly the first panel that bothers me. Perhaps the page opens up with an uninteresting shot of the psychiatrist. Personally, I would love to see the first panel be the close up of the patient's face - essentially, you could get rid of the first panel altogether.