I guess "cruel demonic hands" is unnecessary and the poetics is out of place. The trees are bare and dead. Since this is a description for the artist, this can be iffy. If it was a text in the comic as if in a caption, it may be too much as well.
Originally Posted by DavidC
Contrast this with something in prose:
"They had behind them, to my mind, the terrific suggestiveness of words heard in dreams, of phrases spoken in nightmares."
- Joseph Conrad, Heart of Darkness
Here it works for Conrad because it is a suggestive image on one level and yet is pure prose commenting on prose. Conrad can control the pitch of a story and increase the dramatic voice. In comics, sometimes I find that writers and artists make everything dramatic and over the top and so there is no contrast or control. Although Conrad is all titanic prose, with a fever pitch in his narratives. But I hope you get the point.