Zombies Tale

[plwoods]

Hi all thought i'd post this one page project that I have been working on based on the script found here

Comments & Critiques more than welcome

[Fallenangel]

Looks pretty cool, my only crits are about the clouds and the building in the fourth panel:
a. the cross hatching tech. you used for the clouds doesn't work for me...they just look too solid and square.
b. the building in the 4th panel (that appears in also the 1st one) just doesn't seem as it belongs to the overall scene.

Those are my 2 cents.
Cheers,
Fallen.

[plwoods]

Thanks for the feedback can see what your saying about the clouds will adjust that but the tower from the first pane is reused to bring the reader back to the present after the fashback of the guys idillyc life ....if you get what i mean

[Fallenangel]

Thanks for the feedback can see what your saying about the clouds will adjust that but the tower from the first pane is reused to bring the reader back to the present after the fashback of the guys idillyc life ....if you get what i mean

No problem, what i meant about the building though, that it looks as if it doesn't belong to the overall background...i kinda find it hard to explain.... maybe it's because, it's tilted on one side....dunno. :P

[Bryan E.Warner]

I'm digging this mostly..Pete what are you using for tools?
You need to get your b/w contrast down better

[plwoods]

Thanks for the feedback

I'm using Manga Studio and i'm currently working on the inks for this. I feel its a little OTT with the crosshatching and a bit too busy in parts will post the inks when I'm done

[plwoods]

Thanks for all the feedback. It's really appreciated.

SO i've finished the inks on this I was fairly happy with the first 3 panels.
I also Re-rendered the clouds on panel 4.
Added text as this was just a narrative test page.

[Fallenangel]

Looks really cool

[Bryan E.Warner]

Hey! this turned out well...panel 4 is not muddy now