Reply With QuoteThe last page you re-did has the figures headed towards the left. keep in mind that a comic reads from left to right so by changing the direction your characteds are facing/travelling, u are improving the flow of the page.
yep. It's not even the final version of the script...Originally Posted by Popninja
The last page you re-did has the figures headed towards the left. keep in mind that a comic reads from left to right so by changing the direction your characteds are facing/travelling, u are improving the flow of the page.
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not a probelm, man!
Really great stuff. But then like some of the other posters I'm just a writer looking for an artist to work with.
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Excellent work - I love your scenery work - very believable! I have seldom seen Fin Fang Foom so well rendered. Textures are excellent (if ever colored I think they could be breathtaking). I have definitely seen worse art in Marvel final products.
Critiques: Page 5 White Queen, mannish due to hair style choice and too much chin. Not that there are not mannish looking women out there, but white queen is seldom one of them. Page 1 and 7 Wolverine could use slightly less muscle in the neck (which makes him look like Hulk or maybe a Rob Liefield character). Also in panel 7 I would remove Wolverine's iris detail and perhaps increase the mask detail around the eyes.
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Just kidding! Thanks for the input and the compliments/critiques!
You did a great job on these pages! For the most part the lines are clean and tight. Overall, I think the panel composition tells a story well and is not distracting. I especially like page 2. It seems like you spent a little more time on the pages that have Wolverine in them. The corrections you did to the faces look a lot better, but I think it would be helpful to really memorize the proportional landmarks, structure and planes of the "ideal" head. When you are drawing a head looking straight at you, it is easy to make the nose look smooshed in or flat. For instance, on the 4th panel of the the 3rd page (the corrected one) the man's nose looked too flat because the wings of the nose are way higher than the bulb the nose making it look as though his head was tipped lower than it is. Also the eyes and eyebrows are consistently too high, more in the front views than the profile views. Ideally the face is broken up into thirds. I would recommend getting Andrew Loomis' books on drawing heads and figures. George Bridgman and John Vanderpoel have great books too. Look at your drawings in a mirror consistently. It will help you see when things are off.
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