Lobo Pages

[Matt Mossman]

I really like your work! Are you working on anything right now?

Thanks Ben.

Yes. I have two comic pitches that I'm currently working on as well as a couple of tryout scripts with a publisher. In addition, I'm developing my own online web comic that I plan to get rolling by the summer.

That being said, I'm always up for helping out talented writers looking to get something new out there.

[Jack Flagrant]

The way Lobo reaches out his arm there doesn't look wrong, but I think in looking at both arms in that panel it's easy to see that it looks maybe a bit too long, longer than the left arm which is closest to us and should appear larger than the one furthest away. Also, due to the lack of line work done on the fore (right) arm, it almost looks pasted on and out of place... but that's only my opinion.
All in all, great work, and I hope to see more.

I agree-----GREAT WORK, dynamic!

Personally, it looks like the arm is coming out of his rib. In that same panel, I have a huge issue with the hand holding the Cheech & Chong sized joint; mainly the index finger.

[Whune]

second panel of last page is your strongest; and looks pro-level to me;
(great overal composition; anatomy, and facial expression. the tie/collar feels awkward weak; but that's forgiveable imo)

but everything else is down hill from there.
The second page is weakest compared to that panel on page 3
and if it wasn't for the third panel on page 3 I'd doubt the same person drew the pages.

I disagree on the perspective.
It just doesn't feel quite right to me... a bit too angular, and I don't mean the view of the panel itself.
my standards are high though; so it might actually be passable as seems to be the consensus

[Joe Kerh]

I agree with stepping it up and looking into the perspective of the third page. But...

...is what I hear in my head when I look at these panels. Should he be looking at Lobo's chest/neck or face?

Also...

...we have a massive Lobo sized joint connoisseur over here.

Enjoyable work.

[Jack Flagrant]

Good point, Joe; however, I think it would read more like this...

[pell]

Ahhhh! I so wanted to start a thread where we put captions and dialogue in people's sequentials, but I thought it might get some people upset.

[Juggertha]

Page 3, panel 2 - NOT digging Lobo's cigar wrist there.

[Popninja]

Ahhhh! I so wanted to start a thread where we put captions and dialogue in people's sequentials, but I thought it might get some people upset.

I'm not happy about it. I think it's very disrespectful.

[hadesillustrations]

I agree with Pop. This is a section for crits on sequential pages, not for making fun of them. Be constructive people.

[Joe Kerh]

I have a personal rule: If I post, it should feature a visual element. I apologize if my captions came off as disrespectful. My critique stands. The work it beautiful but features confusing facial expressions here and there.