Reply to Critiques
Red Fox- Thanks. But don't get too attached to her current job. Prison doesn't look well on the resume.
Shaun- O.M.A.C. is the Russian version of S.W.A.T. I had a creative writing teacher berate me for using nunchakus in a feudal ninja story since nunchakus are a chinese weapon and ninja's are japanese. I was extremely pissed, but it changed my mindset about story-telling and I am now OCD about details. (So much so, I double-checked the origin of both items before writing this reply!) Seemed wrong to call them Russian S.W.A.T. and if a artist is working with me, he best learn to research things as well
Tudore- You've found the wall I hit every time I write one of these. How to get across everything about the characters, plot, and setting I want to portray in only five pages. Vespa SHOULD have been more apprehensive about turning Chalres from friend to lover. I would have loved to have stretched that 'Should she or shouldn't she' out a lot longer. In order to tell the larger portion of the story, I had to cut that apprehension out. I think this whole story could have been a full 24-page comic without ever feeling drawn out but alas. The nail file came from the thought 'what does she have to extract the jewel that's more delicate than a climbing axe'.
Cbikle- I am sorry it did not grab you. Was it just you saw the ending coming or you were not invested enough in the character? As I write Vespa and think about further adventures, I have to agree with you. This is not exactly comic book material.