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[Shadow Pencils]

Theses are some pages passed off a treatment that Stan Lee did for something called "The Seeker". Anyway I already took 'em to Wonder Con and got chewed out (lol), but if you want to give it a stab yourself.
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[gloomly]

They're not bad. What did the people at the con say about them?

[danicabrine]

Nice backgrounds ! Especially the rocks in the first panel Only thing, you seem to be working in a very realistic style, which is
good...But you need some ''lossening up'' on the figures. They are a tad to ''stiff''. My suggestion, and proffessionals will tell you this: Life drawing, it helps a ton ! Keep up the nice work.

[Zik (PJ)]

I for one can't give you any advice that could be any better than professional comic book artist could have given you. But as a spectator of comic and someone that purchase them occasionally:

- You have a great, solid penciling technique; you present your lines well that an inker would know where to ink at. From a first look, it may not seem like you spotted enough black areas, but looking again your scenes didn't require much of it (daylight).

-In comics, it's best to find ways to make your characters and scenes as dynamic as possible, yet somehow balance clarity with it (Scott McCloud's Making Comics is on of the best books on the subject). What you have for the aliens arriving and for the woman coming out of the ground and 'transcending' through the window is on point, yet the scene of the cavemen onlookers and the people entering the mall could have been more interactive. Maybe having the two cavemen that's positioned towards us (your audience). In addition to having a third standing cavemen who's back is positioning towards, pointing at the sight of the crash, trying to get the other two cavemens attention towards it. And maybe having a further back camera angle of the store entrance, maybe showing more of a newscrew talking with who I assume is a manager or whatever boss person. And showing a few people simply window shopping 'might' have been good, however I may be asking for too much there!

-I feel you got your anantomy down well, the only mistake I see is the size of the woman's hand in proportion to her face; it looked way too small for a woman that muscular and shapely.

I can only give these suggestions as a spectator; I don't know what it really takes to produce actual comic book pages beyond what I'd read. And as you know, drawing is something that you constantly inprove on. So don't you dare stop drawing, whether or not you will do this for career.

[Juggertha]

Some quick thoughts -

Page one is great. Not digging the small cave guys... but the rest is spot on.
Page two is stiff. The buildings, figures. everything reads like it's got a stick up its..
Page three has some funk to it with the water and all.... but that head is hella-huge. Also, not sure about the apparent subject jump from panel 6 to 7.

What was their feed back for ya?