Sequential redo WIP

[dfbovey]

Thanks man. Should have another page done this week.

[dfbovey]

Rough

[Bryan E.Warner]

So Dave..
Just so I'm clear...you have revamped the older pages and are moving forward yes?

[Electronick]

Nice page, there's only one thing that bugs me. In the third panel, the hand she's using to grasp the seed/bulb looks too tense for what she's doing. I thought she was grinding something with the butt of her palm, stabbing the bag, or crushing something in her hand. The delicate hold she has on the seed in panel 4 is much more natural. I guess it wouldn't be a huge deal, except that it made me confused about what was going on.

[dfbovey]

Thanks Nick, she's meant to be squeezing it a bit in that panel but I can see how it's confusing.

Here's the next page.

[dfbovey]

So Dave..
Just so I'm clear...you have revamped the older pages and are moving forward yes?

In the process of redoing old pages and then will be on to new ones.

[Bryan E.Warner]

Very Cool this is moving again

[dfbovey]

Thanks Bryan!

Here's a redo of page 1...

[choppic]

I love the way you arrange the panels!
Great job!

[Bryan E.Warner]

Very well done...right off the bat you become intrigued...