Sequential redo WIP

[dfbovey]

Reworking some pages that I did a few years ago.

[slyaguilar]

Looking great as usual! The only thing that stands out is on the 3rd panel, the tangent at her wrist, making it difficult to distinguish which arm that hand is actually connected to. It looks like her right hand is connected to her left arm. Can't wait to see this finished, you never disappoint!

[dfbovey]

Thanks!

I totally agree on that tangent. Will definitely have to see what I can do about that.

Hope to have this page done tomorrow.

This is the sequence I'm redoing.



Way too many panels on that page. Gonna basically be making that into several pages and completely change the last half to be more dramatic and carry more emotional weight.

[brokenhill]

Looking good Dave,one the panel where the girl presented the largest her hands look outa wack .
But i'm sure you work this out later.
and too just be really nick pick e ,on the second panel I dont like the rock tangent behind her behind.
great art Dave.

[Caimano]

I remember this project Dave and I'm happy you are going to give it a new start because it was a really cool idea.

Page 1 is very good I like the page layout and the fantastic way you drew te girl anatomy there.

The ony thing i feel confused is the posiion of the hand in panel 3.

can't wait the rest!

[Bryan E.Warner]

I remember this project Dave and I'm happy you are going to give it a new start because it was a really cool idea.

Page 1 is very good I like the page layout and the fantastic way you drew te girl anatomy there.

The ony thing i feel confused is the posiion of the hand in panel 3.

can't wait the rest!

I'm with Simone ...and remember this also

[Deth]

how would someone ink this?

[dfbovey]

Steve, thanks a lot man. Getting ready to work on this now.

Thanks Simone! I think the project has a lot of potential.

Deth, it won't be inked. If it's inked at all it would probably be ink wash if anything. Don't know if the project will be colored, but if it is it would be colored directly over the pencils.

[dfbovey]

Here's the tweaked and basically finished page.

[Electronick]

Nice page, there's only one thing that bugs me. In the third panel, the hand she's using to grasp the seed/bulb looks too tense for what she's doing. I thought she was grinding something with the butt of her palm, stabbing the bag, or crushing something in her hand. The delicate hold she has on the seed in panel 4 is much more natural. I guess it wouldn't be a huge deal, except that it made me confused about what was going on.