Lobo vs Powergirl

**hadesillustrations** · 10-31-2011, 12:02 PM

I need more crits on these. Be as brutal as you like - my skin is thick. I picked up some work with an indy publisher with these pages, but DC was not interested. I've received some very good crits and I already have a few particular things to work on from those crits, but I need more input. Ah la "Fight Club": I WANT YOU TO HIT ME, AS HARD AS YOU CAN.

**Lord Dubu** · 10-31-2011, 01:11 PM

Those first two panels are stunning. I love the cityscape renders.
I also found the whole bathtub as a weapon sequence hysterical.

My only crit is that the faces on everyone but Lobo seem fairly inconsistent. If it weren't for costumes I wouldn't alway be able to tell Power Girl is power girl.

**hadesillustrations** · 10-31-2011, 01:21 PM

That is one of the crits Tom DeFalco gave me. He told me to do more life drawing, which I'll be working on. Thanks for the crit and comments man!

**InkDrop** · 10-31-2011, 01:24 PM

So Good. Only nit-pick is the last panel - I dislike that the tub is up above the two; it seems like it should have fallen farther during the face laser beam shot. Also the lower left ledge in that panel - seems like the tub would have hit it.

**hadesillustrations** · 10-31-2011, 02:38 PM

Thanks Inkdrop! I imagined Powergirl hauling them down faster than the tub to stay underneath it, but this is not indicated anywhere. It all just looks like falling. Thanks for the crit!

**dyuken** · 10-31-2011, 02:46 PM

These pages are very well drawn. My only real critique is that you lose POWER and intensity in some of the panels. I would suggest being a bit more extreme in torso twisting, and contraposto. I am not saying makit cartoony, jjust use enough to make it look powerful.

Also, little visual cues help, like having powergirls fingers dig into Lobo;s bike. Also making sure that the bring wall doesnt cave in such that he remaing bricks are sigularly intact.

Thats all, and just nitpicks really.

Good Job.

**hadesillustrations** · 11-01-2011, 11:06 AM

Thanks for the comment and crit dyuken! I appreciate nitpicks. The one's you pointed out are important ones. I feel I missed several opportunities in these pages to add some tension and drama with small things like digging the nails in. That little detail would have better set up the next page. There's also not enough rubble when Lobo smashes through the wall. More rubble helps sell the scene - it indicates a powerful impact. You still "get it" the way I drew it, but I'm looking to make my work better, so I'm paying attention to this kind of stuff.

Regarding poses, I love dynamic poses, but I've become a little gun shy after receiving a crit a while back from Marvel. A poor excuse, but there it is.

I've been trying to keep my poses a little more "realistic", cuz, you know, flying chicks are real.

**dyuken** · 11-01-2011, 12:28 PM

You know, here is something I figured out a few years ago that kind of Peeved me off. Actually my mom asked me to tell her in depth about the comic industry for a paper she was doing for a journalism class. As I explained comics to her and the whose and whats, she asked me a very honest question.

"I'f the industry is so small, and the professionals so entrenched, how does anybody ever get into to comics?"

I took this a step further and pondered " If this industry is so small and so competative, why do they want me ththere? Or anyone else, for that matter, who can shrink the pie even more?"

In short, I think a lot of the majors try to stifill us artists. They give us hoop after hoop to jump through but in the end the hold all keys and gaurd all the doors.

I think your art is fantastic, sure you got thing you have to work on. but who doesnt.

Keep true man and fly strait.

**hadesillustrations** · 11-01-2011, 02:09 PM

Those hoops they make us jump through are there to test our resolve. Mine is sound. I will work for a major because I've given myself no other option. I will do work for small companies in the meantime and will still do graphic design to pay bills, but my goal is to have a successful career as a comic book illustrator and maybe writer as well. It will happen. I will happily jump through hoops till then.