Executive Assistant Iris sample pages

[Travis-ty]

Again, please excuse the quality of the pics Executive Assistant Iris is one of the HOTTEST books from Aspen Comics, and I decided to try my hand at it. Comments/feedback are always welcome.

[Eric Henson]

Nice work on these. I'm not that great of a sequential story-teller yet so I'll leave that crit to a more compitent viewer, but I must say I like your speed line effects. I actually struggle with good speed lines.

[Travis-ty]

@eric: Thanks man. I'm not THAT good when it comes to speed lines, but I must admit it's probably my FAVORITE effect whenever I draw action sequences or to convey a "TA-DA!" moment.

[shannonh]

Dont break panels.

2nd pg 1rst panel- girls are facing each other and first page they are not. plus it's not the best angle to show an action of chopping at someone. It's hard to see what is happening.

Where did the gun come from? You didn't show her pick it up so it took a minute to recognize what is going on. Subtle things can make or break story telling.

5 pages and only one panel with a background....and the perspective needs work. You need backgrounds to set up the characters and not confuse audience.

I hope this helps. Keep it up!

[Travis-ty]

Thanks for all the tips fellas. The cool thing about all this is that it's a never-ending learning process. Just when you thought you've covered all the bases you discover new ways to improve your work. Keep chiming in guys!