Sample Xmen Page 1

[mansloth]

Done for portfolio, If critiquing, please be harsh, i need to learn.

Thank you.

[scmarooney]

This page looks like it took about a billion man-hours to illustrate, mansloth! I like your style and the your attention to detail. That cityscape you drew seems like photos I have seen of one or another major American city, and is very well done, but there are a few perspective errors here and there that could be tightened up a bit (not sure if you drew in the vanishing points from the photo-ref or lightboxed it? If you didn't use ref for panel 1 I am truly impressed! ) The meteor in panel 1 is a bit jarring looking compared to the rest of the scene. Panel 2 is another nice panel but once again there are a few bits that seem as if they might be done a little better like the arches in the top row of windows are a bit unevenly drawn. Panel 3 isn't bad and I like the interior work here, but the wine-bottle seems a bit small and skinny, as do the wine-glasses. Jean Grey (?)'s nose seems too far down on her face. Hope these crits helped out!

[bluejazz87]

Your cityscape looks decent. Nice three point-vert in the opening panel. Your next panel with an isometric looks nice as well (use a grid for that?) As for your figures, they need work. Practice your anatomy over and over until your hands bleed from drawing too much. Not saying it's that bad, just saying that if you want to get better faster, keep drawing and brushing up on your anatomy. The shading on the man's jacket looks pretty decent though with the folds. And the lighting is pretty consistent I think. But if you're going to have that much lighting on his jacket, you need to have it on the other parts of the figure as well (faces, which comes with studying more anatomy.) Not to mention have some more on the woman. Also, work on your ellipses as well, they look a little wonky in some areas. Good luck and keep drawing.

[Beastie]

You've clearly spent a lot of time on the buildings etc - and they all look great to me.

The figures in the last panel aren't as well drawn though, IMO.

Cyclops, in particular, looks odd. His head looks very small and thin in comparison to Jean's, his mouth looks like a freaky grin I'd only expect to see on the face of a villain, the reflective detail on his jacket feels a little overdone (I'm taking it its made of leather from the level of reflection?) and, because his head is so small, the hand feels too big for the body. So, Jean Grey just looks like a giant sitting there next to him. I'd start by just redrawing his head - and giving him a more friendly face --- but i think you'll probably find that the entire figure is too small. Just think how big Cyclops is when compared to Jean Grey. He's much taller, wider and more muscular -- and that REALLY doesn't come across in that last panel.

[mansloth]

Thanks for the comments guys.

beastie, because of your comment on the issue of scale between Scott and jean, all i can see them as now are kip and lafonda napoleon dynamite.

Keep it up fellows

[Beastie]

i can see them as now are kip and lafonda napoleon dynamite.

That's a very good physical comparison

[alexcat321]

Yeah, i agree with the already given crits. These are great, the buildings are stellar but the figures need more work.

[Eric Henson]

Beastie hit it on the head. I'd only add: detail does not always equal "interesting". Try to keep those shots/angles eye-catching in addition to being well done. Panel 2 is the best in my opinion.

Nice work!

[paime77]

Panel Three: Figures are too close. She'd be sitting in his lap. Table is missing in scene, candle is to Scott's left doesn't appear to be in center of table, figures and table are out of perspective with room in background. Wine glasses appear different, bottle of wine small (may be nitpicking on that one). Build from the bottom up, thumbnail, sketch, perspective sketch. Roger Cruz has some great sketches on his blog that show him laying out everything. The grid for the backgrounds and figures in perspective. Good start though --

[Deth]

the characters look flat to me. they lack depth