If it's a Splash... especially a 2-page ...NO cropping out the figures...I would seek some reference photos so you get a good Idea of how to put all...
It's a little too early to tell what you want or for anybody to give constructive feedback, might I suggest working on it a bit more so we know what...
Nice variety you have here, I can see you're fearless when slapping paint on the screen. Strangely enough I like the loose painterly feel of the last...